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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Random thoughts... All those late night moments have been destroyed... The days seemed to have died down... Swaying around me are memories that mock... The city’s not at a standstill...says it all took place so fast... I don’t know how it happened... You should’ve whispered good luck... There’s a mirror showing us both in 3d’s I keep looking at you…your laughing at me... In this room of shadows…I dash into emptiness I see new boundaries…you never pointed out... You know where all the pieces fall... I should’ve heard the bells of doom... Wish this mind would stop wandering... Time these eyes saw beyond... I still don’t know how it happened Your hands seem too clean to tell... And if my heart stars beating... It won’t whisper a word... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Hope, tears, and renewal Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 74 |
Great poem. I loved this, it was so expressive. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I don’t know how it happened... You should’ve whispered good luck... There’s a mirror showing us both in 3d’s I keep looking at you…your laughing at me... In this room of shadows…I dash into emptiness I see new boundaries…you never pointed out... You know where all the pieces fall... I should’ve heard the bells of doom... --------------------- AVANTI...this is SO damn good...so WAY COOL...man your poems are so deep in thought...NOT RANDOM...EXCELLENT!! your cranking out the masterpieces these days...wanna tell your secret...your inspiration??? (smile) take care, my friend jm ...when you walked into the room, I saw their faces, you made it feel like time was standing still...and I felt fascination... then you turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart...gave me away. glass tiger |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx hope,tears and renual... janet... I'am gald you are liking my work... Secret...you really don't want this kind of insiration...  kidding... anyways... (((((((((hug))))))thanx a lot If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Avanti... I had a feeling, by the delicious bitterness that had dripped from your last few poems... that your inspiration was hard won. (smile) but as the old saying goes..."no pain-no gain"... I dont know how much comfort that wisdom is to all of us...BUT I know it makes for some damn good poetry.  We will always take inspiration where ever the source...right? (smile) take care, my friend jm ...when you walked into the room, I saw their faces, you made it feel like time was standing still...and I felt fascination... then you turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart...gave me away. glass tiger |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
this was great. i especially liked the second stanza. reflected many things that i have experienced. again, very good. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Very expressive poem Avanti. I know that heart of yours whispers "love" and I hope you'll someday find a heart that whispers "I love you too". |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Random thoughts my butt!! You are headed in the right direction, like Munda said you just need another heart to say those words to you!!  I hope you find one soon..There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Absolutely Janet..."everything comes with a price"...though i don't know why i'm still hangign on to that "the best things in life are free"..hehe thanx Danni gals you could relate to it... Munda...I'll wait to hear that... ((((((((hug))))))))))) well ISIS now i feel much better... glad you all like it... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
oh how I know the pain of having new bounaries set,rules changed.... this is wonderful Kathleen |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Avanti~ I don't know how your heartfelt words could be random....more like deep and powerful!-SEA |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thankyou Sea...evryone seems to be saying why? Random...well cause that's how it all happened...any random person...random happening...so i had to go with random thoughts and well Irish rose... Thanx for understannding... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Avanti “Wish this mind would stop wandering... Time these eyes saw beyond... I still don’t know how it happened” This was the most important edge to your poem, It’s a cry to the all to stop this madness, And in time your (our) eyes will see beyond... Don’t wonder how nor why it just is... Just pull it together kid. And remain true to yourself. Your light burns bright. Joel. This is great work so expressive, I’m inspired. Truly... |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx joel...THE WOLF? you gave a reason to smile... and also a lil prowd to inspire you...LOL  If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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