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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods 
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BEDTIME Everything's deadly white Cold as silence Dark as night Nothing's quite what it seems I'm trying to find the words To explain to you How it is, how it feels But confused and misled I'm just lying in bed Staring at the roof To young to die To obsolete to live Further and further Away from reality I slip Asleep I dream of you Meeting me with arms outstretched Loving me without a doubt If only I could stay In my subconsciousness forever Exploring, exploiting my mind But I always awake Writhing I enter the world again And lose face to thriving agony It throws me back Into the arms of life again But yet so dead I tremble in bed |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
Broken~ This is a great poem.I have had that same dream and wished, hoped and dreamed some more that i wouldnt wake up from it but it always happens with out a doubt.Who knows maybe some day our dreams will come true  ~Angie |
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DziR Junior Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 11Sydney, Australia |
Upon reading your poem, tears welled up in my eyes. The best poetry is the poems that cause the reader to be so overwhelmed with emotions that they simply cannot contain themselves. I can tell you now, that I honestly loved your poem. Although I think now I need to buy some more tissues!!!!!! keep growing and writting!!! |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Broken- beautiful, sad, touching... you've left me at a loss for words great poem!! ((((HUGZ)))) as long as we don't give up n hope things will get better ... don't give up hang in there !!! Mystical being which makes ink flow Surround me in your incandescent glow Fill my brain with thoughts and rhyme As I try to capture but a moment in time ~Shan~ |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
I love when i have dreams like these...although lately my sleep has been invaided by nightmares...i believe that these kinds of dreams are a sign of what awaits us on the other side...Don't stop walking my friend...Loved your poem. **HUG** take care Broken Wings "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
'But yet I'm dead!' Kinda how I am feeling today, just like a robot going through the motions. Great piece There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow...this is a gripping poem. I've heard of people being dead in bed before but this took the saying to a whole new level. Loved it. Michael |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
so well written...it had me till the end... often feel like that at night... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
Thanks for all your replies and understanding. I find comfort in you. J_a_f~ Our dream will come true DziR~ If you've ran out of tissues you may borrow some from me StarrGazer~I won't give up. ((((Hugz)))) to you to Broken Wings~I'll keep walking if you'll walk with me, *hug* to you my friend. Isis and Michael~It means alot to get replies from you. Thanks again Avanti~ I like it when what people can relate to what I write. Hang in there |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Broken, this is great, this path is wide, it has been walked before, and they made it to the top, so can we. Again great. moving. Joel. |
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