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ChainedAngel
Member

since 2000-01-07

Posts 55
tx

0 posted 2000-04-02 12:45 PM

Take my heart,
Set me free.
Time to part,
You from me.

Feel the pain,
I can't endure.
You go insane,
Looking for a cure.

Read the book.
You call this Holy?
Listen and look,
Lies you can't see

Hear the screams,
Of the dying man.
It's not what it seems.
From death, he ran.

Bitterness, sweetness?
Heartfelt meekness?
Dying sinless?
Righteousness!

Listen and learn.
Stand up for thyself.
Make your foundation firm,
As i hide from myself.

You wonder what this is?
     Words without meaning.
Stained by a kiss.
     My heart is bleeding..... Righteousness.


There is a dream inside a dream. I'm wide awake the more I sleep. You'll understand when I'm dead

- B. Warner

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

1 posted 2000-04-02 03:36 AM

Very unique poetry. You have a nice talent. I like the way it rhymes. I enjoyed it.

Ronil (the one and lonely)

ChainedAngel
Member

since 2000-01-07

Posts 55
tx

2 posted 2000-04-03 12:21 PM

Thanks Xeonex, I try to write poetry that is unique, that makes you sit and wonder the multiple meanings of it all.

There is a dream inside a dream. I'm wide awake the more I sleep. You'll understand when I'm dead

- B. Warner

Jannel
Member

since 2000-01-18

Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

3 posted 2000-04-03 01:06 AM

yes, and this is definitely full of the double meanings. it was very interesting. i liked it a lot.
jann elizabeth

Love is so short, and forgetting so long.
-Pablo Neruda

dhuron
Member

since 2000-03-19

Posts 476

4 posted 2000-04-03 01:10 AM

I agree. This was great and full of double meaning. Excellent job

daniel

The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

5 posted 2000-04-03 01:15 AM

Hey Stranger, great work you achieved the double meanings alright!

There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)

ChainedAngel
Member

since 2000-01-07

Posts 55
tx

6 posted 2000-04-03 10:47 PM

Thanks for all the replies. Isis i still drop in every once in awhile to see what all is going on. Not as often as i used to though. Expect to see me a little more in the next few months.

There is a dream inside a dream. I'm wide awake the more I sleep. You'll understand when I'm dead

- B. Warner

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