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The Only Place I Wanna Be |
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thebeautybrat Member
since 2000-03-30
Posts 114Florida |
The Only Place I Wanna Be By: H.S. (C) 2000 I've been here all my life, I never want to leave. I feel at home in this place, This is the only place I wanna be. If I were anywhere else it wouldn't feel right, It would just be wierd. I don't wanna go anywhere, This is the only place I want to be. (These were the words I said to myself shortly before i came out of my mother's womb) Born: December 25, 1986 |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Dog Gone It, You sure do have a good memory! LOL cute poem, Show it to your mother, bet she will love it! |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
Brat~ Its nice and safe in there huh.To bad we gotta come out of it to see and experience pain. ~Angie Oh yea i forgot on that last poem to say welcome to passions and to the darkest forum here. Heres a candle so you can see.wouldn't want you to do what i did. LOL i accidently sat on someone in here cuz it was so dark i didn't see them in the chair (in the poem "what shall we do")   |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
GREAT MEMORY! was it really like that? Why did i ever leave?! LOL  take care Broken Wings "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
LOL good job ... I think I said something like let me outta here now !!! and now wish I'd wanted to stay there but live and learn I suppose Mystical being which makes ink flow Surround me in your incandescent glow Fill my brain with thoughts and rhyme As I try to capture but a moment in time ~Shan~ |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
amazing how vivid your memory is!!!  LOL! but i can see it on a less lighthearted side too...inside the womb you are safe outside lies the real word and the innocence is lost...cool poem!! |
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thebeautybrat Member
since 2000-03-30
Posts 114Florida |
hey!! i am going to miss my home!! thanks for visiting and reading!! |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
hey...you got me wondering if i said anything when i came out of MA If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Sweet! I wish I could remember that far back. Joy |
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Malcolm Coleman Junior Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 24United Kingdom |
I'm not sure what it is about your poem... I mean, I like it, it's really good, but there is something about it that doesn't lie right with me. Possibly it is that it doesn't flow smoothly, which in my opinion is the difference between prose and poetry. In fact I think that is it. The fact that it doesn't rhyme is no problem, I write non-rhyming stuff too, sometimes it is necessary. Anyway, I'm just trying to be honest, because that is always more helpful than people lying and saying "oh, that's the best poem I ever read" and that sort of stuff. So I like it, but I just think you can possibly do a little more with it. No offence meant Malcolm Coleman ** It seems I've waited years for this day to end. - Ronan Harris Thanks for reading, hope you're still awake. |
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Virgo Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 46tx |
Well thanks for reminding me of the security I left behind....Just Kidding. Cute poem, though. |
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