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This Mirror. . . |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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There must be something wrong with this mirror It doesn't show the things that I should see Instead of reflections of love past All I see are images d i stor t e d un f o cused Cold, unfeeling and distant. . . I remember when this mirror used to shine and sparkle It was a perfect reflection of the things in my life All the love and the joy Images that were CRYSTAL CLEAR Sharp!! Warm, caring and together. . . So,what do I do with this mirror? I've already cut myself on the crack here in the corner. . . Relfections of life tinted in red The blood not seeming to stop C L O TT ING N O T flowingtoofast. . . My L i f e s e e p i n g a w a y. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Wonderful Poem, and the form you chose fits perfectly. GREAT job my friend The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship." --Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Sandra Cox Junior Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 48Essex, London,UK |
Great piece. Loved the way the words were written conveyed the feelings. Sandra |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
 [This message has been edited by just_another_fe (edited 03-30-2000).] |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
Sven~ Great work here. I love the style you used. very creative ~Angie |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
Sven this is a wonderful piece. it is very hard to look at yourself in the mirror when all you see is the face of darkness looking back at you. take care Broken Wings "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Sven this was great and the way you did the words makes you FEEL them as you read Excellent !!! Mystical being which makes ink flow Surround me in your incandescent glow Fill my brain with thoughts and rhyme As I try to capture but a moment in time ~Shan~ |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Sven this was wonderful...I liked the way you worked your feelings into the format of the poem. Yours truly, Angel "The dark weight of the hour humming madly filling my head with blood and sorrow and dread the executioner's song." -Jewel "The Dark Bells" ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Oh Sven, the hurt and confusion displayed here is so different coming from you. Were you just trying for a darky or are you really upset? Now I'm gonna worry all day... Take care my dear friend There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sven~ this is painful, yet Beautifully written. I'm sorry for your pain.-SEA |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
excellent work here Sven and perfection of presentation as well. some times our own reflection is unrecognizable to us... i relate well take care jm Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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ShadowHeart Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 49 |
Good job! Your poem was very moving...I think that you should clean the mirror though. Maybe it will help with seeing things more clearly. Love is our greatest weakness but when it's found, it's our greatest strength. |
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