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~Venus~
Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128


0 posted 2000-03-27 07:35 PM


i walk down the
lonely corridor
that was once so full of
laughter and life.
the end is within
sight.
the bright, lovely
world outside
blinds me.
why are the lights
in here so dim?
so dim in here...
must make it to the light.
why aren't i moving?

a bell rings.

people file out of
rooms.
laughing. why?
are they laughing at me?

no one is talking to me.

i slowly continue
walking through
the cold corridor,
pushing through
the crowds of people.


 ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~

I'll be here...why? I'll
be waiting...for what?
'll be waiting for you
so...if you come here,
you'll find me...

I promise.

© Copyright 2000 ~Venus~ - All Rights Reserved
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-03-27 07:56 PM


School not always remembered as a happy place.  Good work  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



dhuron
Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

2 posted 2000-03-28 04:16 AM


Yes High School or School in general was not always the best thing.  If you see the end is near hold out...it'll be over soon enough

 The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson


Sandra Cox
Junior Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 48
Essex, London,UK
3 posted 2000-03-28 04:26 PM


I thankfully only have happy memories of school.

Best Wishes

Sandra

Angel Usagi
Junior Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 11

4 posted 2000-03-29 08:24 PM


Great poem!  It really captures school like it is!

 ~*Angel Usagi*~

StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
5 posted 2000-03-30 03:41 PM


Great post  so easy to get lost in the sea of people in school ...

 Mystical being
which makes ink flow
Surround me in
your incandescent glow
Fill my brain with
thoughts and rhyme
As I try to capture
but a moment in time
~Shan~


Hope, tears, and renewal
Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 74

6 posted 2000-03-30 09:03 PM


Awesome work... I don't think you were just talking about school here.
thebeautybrat
Member
since 2000-03-30
Posts 114
Florida
7 posted 2000-03-30 09:09 PM


very nice work!! i felt the feelings exactly!!! hey!! why don't you stop by my poem?? it's called *This is What Some Call Love* Tell me your thoughts!!
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