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Zunera
Junior Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 30
Pakistan

0 posted 2000-03-30 12:08 PM



I wish I could show you my love;
I wish I could shower my trust;
I wish I could open my heart for you to shuffle
the Aces of my feelings;
the King of my thoughts;
the Queen of my dreams;
and the jack of truce, of Love.

I wish I the doors to open;
I wish the panes were broken;
I wish the wind would shudder the loneliness in me;
that sowed the ugly ivy;
that trembled the soothing tunes;
that wrung the soul to death;
and thwarted the spirit to conquer, to win.

I wish I love you forever;
I wish I hate you for better;
I wish I win you for myself and never
let the evil in me to tiff;
let the loath in me to stipple;
let the cruel in me to titter;
and the punk in me to prig, to be perceived.

I wish I could show you my love;
And picture for you my Trust;
And shun the fear that lacks me behind…
YOURS vision of LOVE.



 

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Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-03-30 12:13 PM


Welcome to Passions Zunera!!  Lovely wishes indeed, thoughtful and feeling.  I hope you can too hon  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Zunera
Junior Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 30
Pakistan
2 posted 2000-03-30 12:33 PM


How beautiful those words are;
Never Spoken, Never heard;

How charming those traites are;
Unseen, Unsighted;

How blessed those firends are;
Never met, Never apart;

How enchanting their lives are;
Unlived, Unembraced;

How fantasized this world is;
far from reality, far far behind;
the Vieled Truth !


 

Sandra Cox
Junior Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 48
Essex, London,UK
3 posted 2000-03-30 03:55 AM


Grear first post, powerful emotions!  Welcome to passions.

Sandra

Walter Poe
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787

4 posted 2000-03-30 07:13 AM


Very good first poem very strong congrats

Walter

  Hello darkness, my old friend,
I've come to talk with you again,
Because a vision softly creeping,
Left its seeds while I was sleeping,
And the vision that was planted in my brain
Still remains
Within the sound of silence.

SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
5 posted 2000-03-30 10:54 AM


Zunera~ Welcome!   Powerful enterance!-SEA
StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
6 posted 2000-03-30 03:48 PM


WElcome  Zunera !!! Great  first post very strong  emotions     

 Mystical being
which makes ink flow
Surround me in
your incandescent glow
Fill my brain with
thoughts and rhyme
As I try to capture
but a moment in time
~Shan~


dhuron
Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

7 posted 2000-03-30 04:03 PM


Welcome to Passions Zunera,

Great post.  

I wish I could show you my love;
I wish I could shower my trust;
I wish I could open my heart for you to shuffle
the Aces of my feelings;
the King of my thoughts;
the Queen of my dreams;
and the jack of truce, of Love.


That stanza is wonderful and I think we all have been there once in our life.  keep up the hope

 The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson


Aiden Kelly
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148
Ft. Wayne, IN USA
8 posted 2000-03-31 06:34 PM


Hey!  Welcome to Passions!!!    i love what you've done with this poem!!!  the cadence of it...the words...awesome!  looking forward to reading more of your work, my friend!!!  
Jonas
Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796
Oregon
9 posted 2000-04-01 09:06 PM


Welcome to Passions! I like this piece, and I look forward to reading more  

 Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night.
-Edgar Allen Poe



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