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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
When I wake up and the night has dragged into the day, I get up and whipser to myself, "it's all going to be okay" But it's all in vain for even as I speak of love, hope, and happiness, I can feel the darkness slithering around inside me A snake in search of my heart to prey upon, to consume whole I fall to the floor as it's venomous teeth bite into my heart I cry out as I feel the burning, the venom blending with my blood that was once so young I beg and plead for someone to help me But my call is silent, and never before had I heard such a deafening noise "The dark weight of the hour humming madly filling my head with blood and sorrow and dread the executioner's song." -Jewel "The Dark Bells" ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
DE, I relate to the pain you feel. Well expressed. Sometimes silence can be deafening. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wonderful work here!! That silence we here, for me I find, every other sound is sooo loud too!! Strange huh? Apparantly not, we are all the same under the skin!! Well done There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I love this hon. For some strange reason I feel like I'm in zombie land right now...as if I am not really living..yet I am existing...James |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Well done DE I'm one who longs for the silence and then when I finally have a few minutes of silence hate the very sound because I can hear my mind screaming in the silence ... "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
this one has left me thinking about a lot of things...that i can relate to ... very well written... i like the name...dark enchantress you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
Wow! You express your feelings vividly in this one, and it`s so dark and beautiful. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I fall to the floor as it's venomous teeth bite into my heart I cry out as I feel the burning, the venom blending with my blood that was once so young ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ These are the lines that left the strongest impression on me. I can almost see you, and it seems so familiar to me. Three cheers for you my friend. I`m running out of time, I`m out of step and closing down, I never sleep for wanting hours the empty hours of greed. And uselessly always the need to feel again the real belief, of something more than mockery. If only I could fill my heart with love. -Robert Smith |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Starr ~ I think for me it's more of a belonging, but I've come to appreciate the madness of family and friends. I still crave those blessed moments alone...at least then I can cry without worrying about people finding out. Hang in there...it'll be alright.  Avanti ~ Well I'm glad I got you thinking. I like it when poems do that or when they really hit home. But that's my personal opinion. Thank you (about the compliment on my nic)  Broken ~ I was hoping to be hearing from you on this...thank you...I'm glad that you liked it. THANK YOU ALL VERY, VERY MUCH! Yours truly, Angel "The dark weight of the hour humming madly filling my head with blood and sorrow and dread the executioner's song." -Jewel "The Dark Bells" ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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Virgo Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 46tx |
Great poem....you conveyed what has been hard for me to put into words. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Thank you very much Virgo...your words are deeply appreciated. Yours truly, Angel "The dark weight of the hour humming madly filling my head with blood and sorrow and dread the executioner's song." -Jewel "The Dark Bells" ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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xEmperorEmber Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 136tx |
The words are very beautifully sculpted, describing exactly the feeling of the overwelming plague that a soul can recieve. I loved it. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Thankiez Ember...was kind of surprised to see your reply....but deeply appreciated. Yours truly, Angel "The dark weight of the hour humming madly filling my head with blood and sorrow and dread the executioner's song." -Jewel "The Dark Bells" ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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Hope, tears, and renewal Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 74 |
Incredible, simply great writing. I totally agree with you. |
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