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Dark Poetry #1

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morteZ
Junior Member

since 2000-03-16

Posts 17

0 posted 2000-03-21 10:45 PM

I say goodnight to the trees as they follow the sun into the horizon
they fade away, float into the distance
like burnt cobwebs from a broom
graceful, words are not kind enough to describe it
shadow melting into perfection.

Aiden Kelly
Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 148
Ft. Wayne, IN USA

1 posted 2000-03-22 05:26 PM

hail, oh fellow nature lover!!!

Mother Nature's simple beauties are so inspiring, aren't they? i love this piece...so simplistic and so beautiful...the picture you've created in my mind is absolutely breathtaking and awe inspiring!

especially liked the simile...

they fade away, float into the distance
like burnt cobwebs from a broom

well done!!

dhuron
Member

since 2000-03-19

Posts 476

2 posted 2000-03-23 10:01 PM

Great Poem,

I love your use of words...and the slow

I am in awe..

Jannel
Member

since 2000-01-18

Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

3 posted 2000-03-23 10:59 PM

interesting analogy. (can you really burn cobwebs???) very cool poem.

Dont wake the dead,
Wake the dying,
Don't change what you've said,
Change what you're saying.

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