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Chico
Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 67


0 posted 2000-03-20 09:21 PM


I'ts not right !!

It's not right !
  I'ts not fair.
That I have to fight.
  to breath for air...
Why is it light,
  When you are there?
Then it turns dark as night.
  to dark to bear.

How can you say goodnight,
  without a trace of care?
Leacing me alone in fright..
  That your dreams I'll never share.
Why do you get a green light.
  And get to go everywhere?
Whe I get a red light,
  And can't go anywhere?
You get to go left and right,
  Or anywhere you dare...
But I have to follow my headlight.
  And stay on the throughfare.

I'ts just not right.
  I want to Tell you I care.
But I'm afraid I might.
  Just get a glare...
So I'll just stay out of sight,
  and sit here and stare.
Hoping some day god might.
  Answer my prayer...


© Copyright 2000 Chico - All Rights Reserved
Jonas
Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796
Oregon
1 posted 2000-03-20 10:16 PM


Powerful! Frustration and anger rings loud and clear in this piece.

 Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night.
-Edgar Allen Poe


Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-03-20 10:59 PM


you have expressed you frustration and pain well in this..great rhyme flow in it as well
good work. take care jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman



Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-03-20 11:11 PM


Such frustration, there are two ways to go,
1.  Summon the courage declare yourself and take the consequences.
2.  Let it go, perhaps it's not meant to be, if they haven't woken up yet?
Wrenching poem though, well done!!  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Broken Wings
Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157
Miami, FL.
4 posted 2000-03-20 11:16 PM


Very powerful poem... and your right It's not fair or right.

great poem!!

take care,
Broken Wings

 "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth."
-IYANLA VANZANT



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