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The Abyss |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Standing at the edge of the abyss I stare out into the darkness It seems to stretch for miles around There is not even a hint of the light Exactly how does one become drawn to the abyss To find its emptiness looming before him? It is a long rough road that leads To the mountain high...filled with rocks and weeds The path is overgrown with foliage For the way is not meant to be easy If you find yourself on the cliff It is not a mistake; it is the hand of fate Only fate knows if you will live or will die How much pain your heart can take Before the final good-bye is uttered And you sacrifice your soul to the darkness Sometimes the pain is more than you can bear No matter how hard you search for the light There just is none there Endless agony, angst, and torment beyond compare Fill your days and haunt your nights Stay with you in dark and in light They permeate your very being And take away your life's meaning |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome again Lone Wolf!! This first posting was good. I was a little worried about the lack of rhyming, but you seemed to loosen up as the poem progressed. Reminds me of the song, 'What becomes of the broken hearted!' Well done  May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hello and WELCOME to Passions..very nice to have you here... Only fate knows if you will live or will die How much pain your heart can take Before the final good-bye is uttered And you sacrifice your soul to the darkness Sometimes the pain is more than you can bear No matter how hard you search for the light There just is none there Endless agony, angst, and torment beyond compare ----- this poem IS excellent..you have expressed the deep loneliness so very well...perfect poem for here in the dark... very good take care,jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Isis....thank you for welcoming me to your family. I like to write a lot of free verse, but do rhyme too. Glad you liked it. Janet Marie....hello back and thanks for the kind words. Nice to touch others. More to come!! |
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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
Your words haunt me indeed...so wonderfully written...You seem to be very lonely...I am here if you need someone to talk to...I agree w/ Janet...Welcome to Passions...We are glad to have you here Messenger of fear in sight Dark deception kills the light ~Metallica~ |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Your words drew me right in.... and the feelings came through strongly. Excellent! Kim |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
demonic~angel...thanks for the encouragement and offer to talk...very nice of you. I will keep it in mind. The loneliness comes and goes. That day it was very present for me. Glad to be a part of passions and have people to share it all with. Kim...thank you. They are from the soul and seem to just pour out of me. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Only fate" "knows how much pain your heart can take" You really reached out and touched me with this. Nice writing. James |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
very well done! WOW!! you seem to be a pessimist like me! or is it just one of those days! WELCOME to passions! |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Hey hey !!! Welcome to Passions ... Sometimes the pain is more than you can bear No matter how hard you search for the light There just is none there Endless agony, angst, and torment beyond compare Fill your days and haunt your nights Stay with you in dark and in light They permeate your very being And take away your life's meaning these lines were wonderful great job !!! "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
James, Nice to touch someone. Thanks for the compliment. AK, Just one of those days....not total pessimism. Thanks and I feel at home here in the dark. SG, Happy to be here....thanks. Everyone is so supportive. Makes me feel good to share with others. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Again, welcome. . . Perhaps you should not look down into the abyss, lest you be taken down with the one that you're looking at... perhaps you should look across at the other side and see that across even the deepest abyss, a bridge can be built. . .a bridge to a new life.. . Excellent words. . . -------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
A great piece with full of feelings ..... hope to see more of your work here by the way, welcome to passion |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sven...perhaps you are right and a bridge can be built across. Time will tell. Maybe I am trying to save the one below so that we can start a new life. Just a thought. Creature...thank you and I feel so at home. Yes, there is more to come. A few are in open also. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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