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TanAngel
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since 2000-02-01
Posts 168
Oviedo, Florida, USA

0 posted 2000-03-20 07:10 PM


Fan Fic Dream
He turns to me in the ballroom lined with gold
Eyes open fully...I will charish every word
Opens his lips...but before he can speak...
A monster tears him away from me...all my work down an icy cold drain
Holding his other hand, yet no longer in his arms
The beasts claws too sharp, teeth over teeth in it's hideous appearence
The roof of the ballroom collapses around us...my fellow scouts around me now...
Yelling at me to transform...put on my mask...
Never give up my love, I scream as if I know these are my last words
My love has taken his last breath...he shall be with me at my demise
The mosterous creature opens its snarling mouth, one drop of blood falls to the golden tile
A sword below, somehow I know my destiny
I lift the heavey silver sword with my now empty, lonly hands
One chance to evenge my true loves death
With a tear stained face and shakey, bloody hands I insert the cold silver into the swirling monster
Too good of a death for this revolting monster...
My world turning inside out as I fall onto my knees
Killing another will never bring him back...I look at the pool of blood beneth me
Now cold and beaten I shall die in honor...the pain of my heart throbs as I draw a last breath
Lifting his hand as the scouts...in tears fall beside me...

P.S. hope you like! This was a dream of mine...'cept I left out being recarnated and being transported to Earth...*smile*...more of a nightmare till the end!


 "Sheltered from the world you scare yourself from the rain...away from the dark sickning fog that so stumblest unto your heart...for no true poet holds loves hand..."-TanAngel

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Bronx
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 84
Oviedo, Florida, U.S.
1 posted 2000-03-20 07:48 PM


WOW!-
I really like this one TanAngel. It was great.  It reminded me of some sort of Fairy Tale gone...wrong...  This had a not so great ending to it though.  But it did fit.  I liked the part about a death too good for the monster.  I thought that was a wonderful way of a expressing how much you hated the evil monster.  Great poem!
bye
Bronx


 Be careful!
It's a jungle out there!


~Venus~
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since 2000-01-27
Posts 128

2 posted 2000-03-20 08:15 PM


I like...I like!

 ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~

I'll be here...why? I'll
be waiting...for what?
'll be waiting for you
so...if you come here,
you'll find me...

I promise.

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