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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
Karma maze of lightning Thunder bolts at dawn Laugh at fools delighting In lovers quickly gone Mirror image forward Reality askew Up is downtown sideways Washed in black and blue Loafers walk the sidewalks Quiet, listen, learn, Sleep in sheets or shoestores Where you feel the shadows burn In nights of sleepless armor Someone let me in To guarded hearts or hallways Before life comes again |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
This is simple but deep. So many avenues this could refer to, filled with analogies. Well done  May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Janell I really like what you have done with this. It has a certain kind of haunting feeling to it, but also a sense of mystery. Great job!! AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I second amy and isis's comments and add that i enjoyed the rhyme flow and pace of the poem...good work. take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
well...I LOVE IT!!! the images are so haunting to me... ***** Mirror image forward Reality askew Up is downtown sideways Washed in black and blue ****** the downtown...black and blue thing just hit me as violence though i could be wrong...but like isis said there are so many different ways you could take this...wow! i like it jann! great work sweetie! |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Jannel this is great !!! "A poet is one who spends a lifetime standing out in thunderstorms, waiting to be hit by lightning" ~Randal Jarrell~ |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
Thank you all for your replies. It generally referred to the messed up way we would see society if we stepped out to look at it, as if we were reading a book about our world a hundred years from now. Dont wake the dead, Wake the dying, Don't change what you've said, Change what you're saying. |
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