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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
I fall from the heavens above Falling through clouds Thunder and lightning surround me Electricity surges through my veins Falling further Into a spinning black hole Souls scream out in agony Reaching for me as I fall further into blackness Entrapment of the souls One by one losing control I twist away from the retched hands of souls Black hands still reaching for me Voices stronger than ever in my mind Little by little I become a lost angel Forever twisting through the twilight of the night Messenger of fear in sight Dark deception kills the light ~Metallica~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
very vivid and chilling images in this..you take the reader along in your descent in this one...very good work. jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
great job !!! I love the forever twisting through the twilight of the night and your storm references ...  ((((hugzzz))))~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Good work. I agree with JM...what images you use. Felt like I was falling. |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
kinda fits with your name doesn't it! i really love the imagery but i love the whole poem! you are very good! i envy you! keep it up! |
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