Dark Poetry #1 |
Shadow Of Doubt |
Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Shadow Of Doubt I'm in a shadow of doubt who made me think I could be anything worthwhile. I feel a grave of words tumbling upon me burying me alive screaming. Who was I to think my words could mean anything, something No one hears me as I dive deep below level dying. |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
This's got a lot of verbal depth. A hole, of any depth, can be dug by anybody. But don't forget to look up too. The sky's also there. Keep your chin up : ) This was good writing, I loved it. We write for a purpose, to release our feelings. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Emotionally dying yes, physically no. Like Artur said look up and see the good ... Very descriptive word usage well done May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
very good job even the form of the poem gave me the feeling of sinking lower and lower .... ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
This brought tears to my eyes and a gasp. That means you did very good!! Excellent poem, wonderful emotion, very well expressed imagery. AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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