Dark Poetry #1 |
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Lonely Shadow Member
since 2000-03-14
Posts 128Virginia ![]() |
Here I lie, shrouded in darkness my pain and sorrow my only companions I see a dim light ahead the light of love I once knew the joy and happiness it once brought me a long lost memory I sit and ponder what I may have done to have my life torn ussunder my hopes and dreams scattered like ashes against the wind my heart crumbled in my hand I look for some piece that resembles what I once was But, like a dagger through my heart I realize... I belong here drifting through the sea of turmoil forever... [This message has been edited by Lonely Shadow (edited 03-16-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hi lonely shadow and welcome to passions, you make a perfect first impression with this piece...very nice, i love the gothic feel to it...nice to have you here. take care, jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome to Passions and the dark forum. I too love poetry with a gothic feel or theme to it. You belong here my friend!! Bravo and welcome ![]() May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Mai Ling Junior Member
since 2000-03-15
Posts 15 |
Greetings I come in Peace! Have you been writing for so long?.. it shows.. You a really great poet. You captured the gloominess of my spirit. Nice going! |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
Welocome to passions. Gothic feel indeed, and so well done...... There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul... a-alibaster |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Welcome!! ![]() ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
That was a nice poem. I feel your lonliness through these words. Hope to read more of your poetry in the future. Much love, One love, PEACE |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
Beautiful through every word yet there is the sadness behind it...this is beautiful like I said and I look forward to more!! "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beauty and pain ahh that is life huh? This was all too true and well written. Welcome to Passions and the dark forum. Hope you come to love it here amongst our family of friends.. ![]() May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
LS~ WELCOME! Excellent poem! ![]() |
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demonic~angel Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 54Kansas |
Great first imperssion...I love the gothic feel to it...Wonderfully written and it shows that you have been writing a long time...Welcome to passions.. Carpe Diem... |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
A beautiful yet sad poem ![]() Great first post hope to see more of it soon.... By the way, Welcome to passion ![]() |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Welcome to Dark Passions Lonely Shadow...I love this poem...it's so beautiful even in it's dark meaning....it speaks worlds to me.. Yours truly, Angel "The dark weight of the hour humming madly filling my head with blood and sorrow and dread the executioner's song." -Jewel "The Dark Bells" ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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~Venus~ Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128 |
Great first piece... ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~ I'll be here...why? I'll be waiting...for what? 'll be waiting for you so...if you come here, you'll find me... I promise. |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
welcome, sorry it took me so long to welcome you, but i welcome you and your style and i look forward to many more posts. aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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Lonely Shadow Member
since 2000-03-14
Posts 128Virginia |
I want to thank all of you for your comments. This was my first attempt at writing a poem and as you can tell, I wrote it at a very dark time in my life. I have posted another poem in the Corner Pub if you would like to read it, but it's a bit brighter than this one. Once again, I'd like to say thank you all for your kind words. To find true love is to know true happiness... to lose true love is to lose everything |
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