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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Can’t seem to give it up These things that twist my broken mind Try to see what’s eating me And don’t get left behind The only thing to stop my upward climb Is my steady and systematic mental decline Won’t ever change my ways Where the body leads, the head follows Never will I be filled Can’t let these feelings show Don’t try to bring me up From so far down below Everywhere I look, they’re all I see They are always there, mocking me Maybe I’m just dreaming That everyone I know is haunting me You used to take my offered hand And make me feel like the only one Damn these changes and mental strangers That always make me come undone In my eyes, something that makes you run From the thing I’ve become There’s nothing more I can do I hear laughter everywhere I go Bleeding me, feeding me Until I lose all control And the thing I cannot understand Is the thing I will never know Everywhere I look, they’re all I see They are always there, mocking me Maybe I am just dreaming That everyone I know is haunting me I’m so far gone now I know the shadow is starting to win Try to see things in me That I just can’t let in My world of light starts to dim And my descent begins |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Where the body leads, the head follows Never will I be filled Can’t let these feelings show Don’t try to bring me up From so far down below --------------- You used to take my offered hand And make me feel like the only one Damn these changes and mental strangers That always make me come undone In my eyes, something that makes you run From the thing I’ve become There’s nothing more I can do I hear laughter everywhere I go Bleeding me, feeding me Until I lose all control And the thing I cannot understand Is the thing I will never know ------------ I’m so far gone now I know the shadow is starting to win Try to see things in me That I just can’t let in My world of light starts to dim And my descent begins -------------- as previously mentioned...you come undone exquisitly... this one moves me...makes me want to give you a (hug)...  stalking you with intrigue, your jm |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
This was kinda sad JML. As I inturpt this as slipping into a depression. Please remember there is always light. It just takes us some time to find it again. Your bud, kitkat |
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Mai Ling Junior Member
since 2000-03-15
Posts 15 |
Painful one JML, but incredibly creative. Keep up the wonderful poetry. |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
great one JML. I’m so far gone now I know the shadow is starting to win Try to see things in me That I just can’t let in My world of light starts to dim And my descent begins these are some great lines, especailly the part about the shadow. im sorry i havent replyed in a few days. ill catch up i promise. great post. aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Hey, um - been down here awhile. Come join the party. LOL Seriously, deep reaching poem. I understand where you're coming from but believe me when I say - you need not go THERE! Great poem michael |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
Muy Excellente!!!! I liked this poem very much, GREAT JOB! Once in a while, my shadow overcomes me, but I stand in a bigger and darker shadow that overcomes my shadow. Hard to understand, but it works. Much love, One love, PEACE |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
JML~ it sounded to me like a drug addiction or something out of your control.........well, it's getting late and past my bed time...............great poem as always-SEA |
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