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This Life I've Had |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
So sad This life I’ve had Nothing in the world Ever makes me feel alive Too bad This life I’ve had Reach out Open my mouth to shout You used to be there To help me rise above this Left out Now I’m without You used to be Another part of me Now you stand apart And shiver from what I’ve become Turning from me What is this thing happening to me? I used to be Heaven sent You gave me voice to vent I never gave in To someone else’s sin But I won’t repent Until I’ve fallen, spent Discontent With where my life went My downward descent |
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Anthony Junior Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 12 |
Such sentiment in a few words, very difficult to achieve but i believe you have done it. I loved it |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
That was a really good poem. "I use to be heaven sent..." me too... Keep writing. Much love, One love, PEACE |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
Dicontent=always heaven sent=never I like the way your words flow together .... more than that...I like how it makes one look at thier own life as they read the words of anothers..... There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul... a-alibaster |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
Excuse my mis-spelling of "discontent" above....apologies! There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul... a-alibaster |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You used to be there To help me rise above this Left out Now I’m without You used to be Another part of me Now you stand apart And shiver from what I’ve become ---------------- I never gave in To someone else’s sin But I won’t repent Until I’ve fallen, spent Discontent With where my life went My downward descent you wrote this for me right...you've been reading my mind...peeking thru the wires... did someone tell you I am the queen of discontent...welcome to my world...  awesome poem Jer...seriously...perfect flow and rhyme. you really are good(smile) stalking you always, your jm |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you thank you thank you. Did i say thank you? *L* Sorry, but this is from 1994. Hey, i'm getting closer to today with every post...LOL But 2 a day like the aspirin... |
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