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atslanta
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since 2000-03-10
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0 posted 2000-03-11 09:53 PM


A day, a place, a feeling in heart
a commitment, a ground, a pairing, a start
we face the sun as it rises to our eyes
we’ll turn our backs as it sets on our guise

you know we lose, you know we win
we opened the door and a song begins
a story is told when you speak to my face
what are those words whispered now when you turn away

on the empty page before you
you can place down what you dare
truth of a lie is that two people know
a third hears only one of the pair

a room of shadows that we stood in
I see your face turn as the walls move in
you wish greener grass on the other side
I want to blame you now as you run and hide...............still I remember another side

  lying down, looking in your eyes,
  by you, I felt electrified
  two clasped hands and warm thoughts
  a light and sun for which I had sought
            
  an unforgettable view, the mountian our seat
  we huddled close, our solitude beat
  as we walked down.............that mountain view
  as we walked down.............I thought of you

when the air turned, clouds flew across our sky
leaving shadows and uncertain lies
you say my trust was empty and I lost something good
but you know I was there and you knew where I stood

the story’s got a familiar taste
something a way you’ve seen before
a selfish love, the soul to waste
turn your back, close another door

stones in the eyes who’ve walked away
they litter your heart and pave the way
a road so darkened, the seeds you’ve sown
an empty walk you walk alone

shattered mirrors in the eyes
bliss, then uncertainty, then compromise
you water the plot, but unearth the dirt
you offer your plate then avail the hurt

a hurt you have that comes from within
shake it off I can, but it’s under your skin
stop, take a look deep in your own eyes
your soul speaks the truth and tells no lies

so our moment’s been and stars watched us part
but my wish of days of past settle a weary heart
“what do you want from this?” you asked to me,
in a word........................Honesty.










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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-11 09:58 PM


wow... you have an amazing gift for rhyme and flow...and I love the emotions of this poem...this is excellent..gotta go read it again ... wanna take it all in...(smile)
love the impact and simplistic but profound statement of the last line...very nice work... more, more...
take care, jm

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne



atslanta
Junior Member
since 2000-03-10
Posts 13

2 posted 2000-03-11 10:24 PM


JM,
  Thank you for your encouraging words.  This is an important piece of writing and it is great to be appreciated.  Thanks.
  

                                A


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