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atslanta Junior Member
since 2000-03-10
Posts 13 |
A day, a place, a feeling in heart a commitment, a ground, a pairing, a start we face the sun as it rises to our eyes we’ll turn our backs as it sets on our guise you know we lose, you know we win we opened the door and a song begins a story is told when you speak to my face what are those words whispered now when you turn away on the empty page before you you can place down what you dare truth of a lie is that two people know a third hears only one of the pair a room of shadows that we stood in I see your face turn as the walls move in you wish greener grass on the other side I want to blame you now as you run and hide...............still I remember another side lying down, looking in your eyes, by you, I felt electrified two clasped hands and warm thoughts a light and sun for which I had sought an unforgettable view, the mountian our seat we huddled close, our solitude beat as we walked down.............that mountain view as we walked down.............I thought of you when the air turned, clouds flew across our sky leaving shadows and uncertain lies you say my trust was empty and I lost something good but you know I was there and you knew where I stood the story’s got a familiar taste something a way you’ve seen before a selfish love, the soul to waste turn your back, close another door stones in the eyes who’ve walked away they litter your heart and pave the way a road so darkened, the seeds you’ve sown an empty walk you walk alone shattered mirrors in the eyes bliss, then uncertainty, then compromise you water the plot, but unearth the dirt you offer your plate then avail the hurt a hurt you have that comes from within shake it off I can, but it’s under your skin stop, take a look deep in your own eyes your soul speaks the truth and tells no lies so our moment’s been and stars watched us part but my wish of days of past settle a weary heart “what do you want from this?” you asked to me, in a word........................Honesty. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow... you have an amazing gift for rhyme and flow...and I love the emotions of this poem...this is excellent..gotta go read it again ... wanna take it all in...(smile) love the impact and simplistic but profound statement of the last line...very nice work... more, more...  take care, jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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atslanta Junior Member
since 2000-03-10
Posts 13 |
JM, Thank you for your encouraging words. This is an important piece of writing and it is great to be appreciated. Thanks. A |
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