Dark Poetry #1 |
Not Alone |
devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
In this bed for two I sleep with you And I watch you through The eyes of the new My mind does wonder My soul does ponder Would love put assunder Lack of rest, fear of slumber I ache from loves loss I turn and I toss I gaze at you across A crowded hallway for the lost Terrified I confess Mortified I stress How I loathe the soft caress Of my dear sweet lonliness Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
How I loathe the soft caress Of my dear sweet loneliness Cool lines...even though i love solitude *L* |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
i agree jer that solitude and lonliness can be nice but there are times when it seems to have a grip on you and wont let go. and thats when it scares me. thanks for the reply. aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
devin this is beautiful, and powerful, so many emotions expressed in so few words. very well written...great rhyme too jm you're really alone at last... you're bored and fading fast, if it's true you'll fall from the past all you'll have to do is ask you'll feel but never be you want and always need price you pay for wanting to see will you have all you've ever dreamed... robin wilson |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
Thats what a poems bout, the words that flow through your heart, it might be directly from you, but touches all who read. Certainly did me. Keep em coming. Much love, One love, PEACE |
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atslanta Junior Member
since 2000-03-10
Posts 13 |
Thanks for writing this. Lonliness is a bitter-sweet companion that, at its best, cannot serve like that of the strength of love. Great rhyme and imagery! A |
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