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| Dark Poetry #1 |
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All for You |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland 
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I did it all for you, I loved, I cried, In a way I died, All for the love of you. I was always there for you, I loved you, loved making love to you, We shared so much, Now my life is empty. What didn't I do? We loved often and well, We talked day and night, We laughed, and shared, we were under a spell. But you have a restless soul, One is never enough, I couldn't give you all you needed, Why is life so rough? I wanted to be that everything for you, Wanted to be your beacon, your shining light, I saw you flirting but pretended not to see, Now my life is shrouded in never ending night. If I couldn't keep you happy, I must be no good at all, And as I stand on this cliff edge, No one will catch me when or if I fall. I want you to save me, Lead me away from the fall, From the jagged rocks below, If only you could give me your all. Reality hits hard, Just like those jaggered rocks, I'm sick of this world and my life, It's constant pain and knocks. Blinded by emotion, I close my eyes, The wind physically rocking me, I glance up at the blue and white shredded sky. Oh honey, Oh God, oh anybody, Come and save me, Show me a reason to live, Something worth saving in me..... DON'T WORRY I AM NOT SUICIDAL NOT IN THE LEAST, JUST A DESPERATE GIRL KIND OF POEM  May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
I did it all for you, I loved, I cried, In a way I died, All for the love of you. These lines are wonderful !!! Great poem good job on the emotions ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you do desperation justice in this piece Isis...emotionally strong poem... now step back from that edge..c'mon over to my house and we'll write desperate chick poems together...  take care, jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Janet Marie I'd love to do that, seriously. We should get together!!! Thanks hon May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
When love goes to the fullest, it is like putting your soul and heart in the other person's hands, and that person has the ability to make or break you..... I thought this was very good writing, with some torrentious views, but..... very very very good! Cogitationis poenam nemo patitur. (Nobody should be punished for his thoughts.) ----------------------------------------------- Ib gautre untam repim crubastro. Voldub frolk dra foritia grent... From the old tongue The mist is gathering from across the sea. We will meet in the shadow of the Tower in Tar Valon. (WoT by R. Jordan) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you for stepping back from the edge. . .I know that it's a great view. . . but take a look at this side and see what's over here. . . Excellent poem, my friend. . . I too, have felt this way sometimes. . .as you will see. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
isis *hugs* if you go this whole forum will be there to catch you. and we will pull you from that edge. like janet said come on over and we will desperite poems together. i cant write chick peoms like she said but i can write a good desperate on though. and also remember this. no matter how low you get i will always be there to pick you up...........Then it comes to be that the soothing light at the end of your tunnel is just a frieght train coming your way... MetallicA |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
i too, like the opening lines much. And i know the sentiments involved...you dont have to be a chick to be desperate. Is this poem a companion of your "just one of your harem" piece? It seems so to me. I sense a theme here.... |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I liked the opening lines as well. Sets the tone for the rest of the piece. Desparation is an interesting emotion. Blinds a person I think. You have nice vision for emotion that I see often in your writing. I am 46 and counting backwards. Plan to stop somewhere around 25 and stay. Thanks for the nice comments to "When a child dies". I'm touched by your openness. Best wishes |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
JML thanks you are spot on it is a sister piece to the Harem one, well done!! Danny I was guessing late 30's. I'm 32 and starting to count backwards myself  I know you are all here for me but as I said I'm not depressed, just a poem written. Sven, I count my blessings every day, and in the count there is always you... Thanks everyone for reading this, glad you all enjoyed it, could relate to it May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Isis, WOW!! This one really left me feeling slighly breathless! I loved how this flowed together with such emotion. I am glad that you didn't step over that ledge. We all surely would miss you!! Thanks so much for posting this. It put some things in my own life into perspective. Take care, AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Isis your poetry is really inspired. I think you have lots of love to give and you simply want to be loved and appreciated in return. I loved the style you used with this poem. Keep writing beautiful poetry like this right from your soul and right from your heart. James |
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