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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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UNDONE < !signature-->If I could fling a wish into the breeze, I'd throw time into a deep freeze. Fly backwards on broken wings of ice, To the point I fell from paradise. Landing on earth with an estranged cry, In search of the warmth in a mother's eye. Only to find my emotional wishing well Was an endless, aching tunnel to hell. I would catch the soul in free-falling flight, Wrap it in the blinding blanket of night. Then with joyful bliss, blow it a kiss, And roll it softly into the abyss. Rolling myself in laughter knowing, I'd never realize if I was coming or going. But the echoes would die this night, forlorn. Come sunrise tomorrow, I'll have never been born. Still staring at the blackened sky I've known, If dreams came true, no one would be alone. No hearts would ache, nor souls be grieved. And none would miss the misconceived. But maybe on a peaceful, clear night, A star will break from the sky in flight, And from a million wishes, hear just one; "If I could only be undone." Michael Anderson For all behind was dark and drear, And all before was night and fear. How many hours of night or day In those suspended pangs I lay, I could not tell; I scarcely knew If this were human breath I drew. Lord Byron [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-09-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If I could fling a wish into the breeze, I'd throw time into a deep freeze. Fly backwards on broken wings of ice, To the point I fell from paradise. Landing on earth with an estranged cry, **In search of the warmth in a mother's eye. Only to find my emotional wishing well Was an endless, aching tunnel to hell.** -------------- No hearts would ache, nor souls be grieved. ***And none would miss the misconceived.*** as always,there is that one line or verse that speaks to me...sometimes whispered...sometimes screamed...but I hear and feel it either way... emotionally beautiful poem M. take care, jm < !signature--> you're really alone at last... you're bored and fading fast, if it's true you'll fall from the past all you'll have to do is ask you'll feel but never be you want and always need price you pay for wanting to see will you have all you've ever dreamed... robin wilson [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-09-2000).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Well, I don't wish you to be undone! I know I've said it before, but I'll say it again, THIS is the type poetry that is my favorite! You write it so well, and with such ease, and MAN, do you have a way with words like no other, when you set your mind to it! Let me see...I counted 11 lines in here that are just awesome! It feels good to write something so superb, huh?  Occasionally I get on a roll like this, and spit out a darn good poem...but not as often as you. This one really shows your talent of expression. Beautiful. Glad I happened onto it. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
This is too good to be buried so fast....Back Up...(KICK) |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
wonderful poem. some of the lines are so profound they blew me away. im glad it got kicked back up i might have overlooked it again and missed out on this wonderful read. aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Michael...your words always leave me motionless...that's cause i felt the way you have for soo long... funny how you cling on to those dreams... "if dreams were true...noone would be alone" I admire your amazing talent to speak of pain in so may ways...and still move and touch any person...i know it comes from within and thus could never get monotonous...but only deeper and meaningful with insite for so many through my last post i got to know MICHAEL-THE FIGHTER... you've been through a lot...and you courage ,determination and the will to go on...and on...is something we can all learn from!!! thankyou for the wisdom... Avanti you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I don't want you to be undone....there is a reason for everything..for everyone's existence...yours my friend is to enlighten and inspire the thousands who read your poetry! |
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atslanta Junior Member
since 2000-03-10
Posts 13 |
Michael, Wow, great poem. I'd be remiss if I didn't say how much I enjoyed a poem with such a fragile topic as this. I appreciate it and I hope you achieved a solace in writing it. A |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I just LOVE it when others make my point for me...I love being right...(smile) thanks AVANTI and Poet D for the "back up"...  |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
janet, I know - I think this one probably did a lot more screaming than whispering, too. Gen, I don't know if you could possibly understand how moved I was at your reply. Not because I needed a pat on the back - but I needed to know you didn't wish me undone... cause that's exactly where I was. Thank you. devinmaria, I'm so glad you liked this. AVANTI, you humble me with your words. It does wonders for me to know my poetry is viewed in such a manner. PdV -thousands? Seriously, if I reach but one then what more need is there... atslanta, maybe a temporary "solace" anyway....but it never lasts long. I'm sure you will see much more of the same from me...LOL Thank you All for the kind replies. Michael |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
It'd be interesting to see if the world turned out to be much more pleasant if it were undone and time went backwards, not against us. I'd say that we have to live with consequences whatever we do, and that's being human. I greatly enjoyed this as I enjoy all your other poems. ----------------------------------------------- Cogitationis poenam nemo patitur. (Nobody should be punished for his thoughts.) [This message has been edited by Artur Hawkwing (edited 03-12-2000).] |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
I have to say that I really admire your poetry. How you can take such pain, and make such beauty is truly amazing. You certainly have a way with words and a creative mind to boot. Hey, and you aren't bad looking either! |
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gypsyqlt Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 147Bradford,Vt USA |
Michael, What a beautiful, emotional piece of work ! I, too, am glad you've not been undone; the joy and pleasure your writing brings to others is invaluable ! What a talented man ! I've printed this out to share with friends. Keep it up, (and stay the hell out of "Piggy"(adult), or we might grab you ! Jocelyn |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
Beautiful poem, I don`t know what to say. I`ve printed it out and I`ll read it tonight, crying myself to sleep. |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
PD Said exactly what I feel everytime I read anything you write. "yours my friend is to enlighten and inspire the thousands who read your poetry! " Your talent is awesome and endless!! Kim |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Michael, Kicking this one back on up to the top! SMILE  As always I am left breathless after reading your work. You are a truly amazing individual. To say you have a way with words, would be an understatement. Your poetry speaks to me in a way few others do. Take care!Amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Now what could I possibly say after all the others? Only that I like this Michael, it is incredible strong and has many feelings I can identify with. Well done. K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Now what could I possibly say after all the others? Only that I like this Michael, it is incredible strong and has many feelings I can identify with. Well done. K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Michael~ your poetry never fails to move me, to make me think and to make me feel. Your talent is awesome.-SEA |
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