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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
this ache in me festers stirring my eyes and shaking my brain visions of your love halucinations, make me insane a love i envisioned in my mind and my heart a love i created and you do not feel and its idea is ripping me apart i have to escape it i have to set my soul free for this love i envisioned sadly, will never come to me this place where i rest reeks of your cologne as you made me your slave it became the only love i will know and i cant breathe you or breathe for you anymore so im packing up my heart and im slamming the damn door my heart on my sleeve my soul in my pocket hurt on my list pain on the docket im leaving im gonna disappear im heading anywhere but here Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and i cant breathe you or breathe for you anymore so im packing up my heart and im slamming the damn door my heart on my sleeve my soul in my pocket hurt on my list pain on the docket im leaving im gonna disappear im heading anywhere but here somebody get this girl a guitar..she just wrote an awesome song... you go girlfriend...excellent expression of strength to move on... "hurt on my list...pain on the docket"...cool lines. thanks for your kind words to my work in here  take care janet marie you're really alone at last... you're bored and fading fast, if it's true you'll fall from the past all you'll have to do is ask you'll feel but never be you want and always need price you pay for wanting to see will you have all you've ever dreamed... robin wilson |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
you need not thank me for replys to your wonderful work, oh talented one. actually this one was inspired by a song i hear at work all th etime and love. the last two lines came from the song. i guess i could write a new song, lol. but thank you so much for all the nice replys as well. aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Janet Marie said everything that I could have, would have about this one! This is definately one that would be a great song! Incredible writing and raw emotions expressed. Kim |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
very nicely done !!!  ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very vivid and heartfelt writing. James |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Yep, sometimes anywhere's a much better place. Can much relate to this one. Michael |
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mojar Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 169granbury, texas, usa |
dm, very enjoyable read, i really like this. i very much appreciate your comments about the ones that i have posted. thanks mo. |
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