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KimW
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 268
Medford, Oregon, USA

0 posted 2000-03-08 11:02 PM


Everything’s dark in this lonely world.
Dismal silence permeates the house.
No one seems to exist
No hope, it is just gloom and I.

Is it merely a state of mind?
Perhaps a darkened mood.
All that runs through my mind
is a world that seems quite doomed.

No financial wizard will wash away the tide
of ebbing debts and bad credit
washing upon my private shore
The Bills are piling higher
No relief in sight.

The rent should have been paid
on the first of every month
But I stretch and bend the rules
everytime right up to the 5th.

Then the children plead and beg
for things-
simple little pleasures
(God! The guilt of saying No,
we simply can not afford)

The old tin can of change
is empty here
there is no more to tap
And yet the bills are piling
in a heap with no relief.

Still I press myself each day
to get up and go to work
without a sign of hope
Still no bills can be paid
and I ask what am I working for?
(Soft sobbing)
Who will take care of me?
And chase the bad feelings away
that have washed upon my shore?

KdW, Copyright 3/8/00


© Copyright 2000 KimW - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-08 11:08 PM


KIM, well i realted WAY too much to this one...you mean we are actually suppose to make the rent ON TIME??? huh? WHO KNEW!!
all sarcasism aside ..this is an emotional piece that i understood well, I will think of you in your struggles...I know its not easy...stay strong. take care, janet marie

 you're really alone at last...
you're bored and fading fast,
if it's true you'll fall from the past
all you'll have to do is ask
you'll feel but never be
you want and always need
price you pay for wanting to see
will you have all you've ever dreamed...
robin wilson


devinmaria
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
2 posted 2000-03-08 11:38 PM


first off, great piece.  even at my age i cannot escape the requirenment of bills and working long hard hours and still seeming to get nowhere.  i know how you feel girl.  i have a 15 month old daughter and she drains me in milk and diapers.  so i empathise.  very "hit home" kinda piece.  

aimee


 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

Flame
Junior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 34
Tennessee
3 posted 2000-03-09 12:20 PM


So very true..I can understand this totally...Sweetest Thoughts, Cheryl
StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
4 posted 2000-03-09 01:47 AM


very well written with so much truth of emotion



[This message has been edited by StarrGazer (edited 03-09-2000).]

KimW
Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268
Medford, Oregon, USA
5 posted 2000-03-09 09:52 PM


Thank you all very much for your replies, comments and warm thoughts. This is not my best writing.. it is not intended to be.
This is raw emotion and I needed an outlet.

As crazy as it sounds, knowing I am not alone with these struggles and reading your warm thoughts..... makes a difference and really helps!

Kim

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