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| Dark Poetry #1 |
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~No Chance For Second Chances~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Two women stand there, in the waiting room, obviously uncomfortable and tense, there is so much pain between them...even a bystander could sense. The room is filled with the thickness of their apprehension... neither one sure of the other one's true intention. They appear to be near strangers, yet they are an almost exact reflection of one another, two generations of pain...this grown daughter and her mother. How did they get to this point-where there seems to be nothing left to say, the only thing they seem to have in common is...neither wants to stay. It is a chance meeting that brings them here face to face... a painful reminder of the past, separation nor time has been able to erase. The childhood wounds are deep...the family secrets say it all... Abuse, Abandonment and Alcohol... (and like her own parents, the mother knows this too has been her downfall). The daughter broke the cycle, she refused to let it take her in, but she carries the anger with her, tired of seeing the dysfunction win. So here they are ... now looking to each other for sign... searching for the words to start again and leave the pain behind. These words don't come easy...sometimes they don't come at all... too many mistakes, no second breaks...another family takes the fall. Janet marie < !signature--> When you see through love's illusions, there lies the danger... And your perfect lover just looks like a perfect fool So you go running off in search of a perfect stranger While the loneliness seems to spring from your life Like a fountain from a pool. Jackson Browne [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-03-2000).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
JanetMarie, Bravo!! Glad you can break the cycle.. very moving piece hon. I've come to love reading all your work, it's addicting  May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
You reveal so much about yourself in your poetry and that must be why I like it so much. This poem made me feel so sad and lost. A bond with a mother should be strong, but it seems like sometimes, no matter how hard you try, it can't be.  Enjoyed reading another one, JM. -Sonje Chinese fortune cookie say: There are many unexpected & thrilling surprises in store for you. |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Another heart wrenching poem, isn't it a shame what alcohol can do, you have expressed yourself beautifully in this, I could feel the tension. Breaking away is the hard part, and it sounds like you've done great. Take care. Bonnie |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
very well written janet... it's painful but it as an element of hope...positive... i sense pain... love Avanti you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Too many times the words don't come at all. Powerful work here - I could feel the tension. Michael |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nicely written...there always seems to come a day when the consequences of our actions comes crashing down...with all its misery. And yet if the cycle is broken a new path is taken and a new journey has begun. Where there was misery now the future holds hope. James |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I could feel the tension in this one. Sad at a time when they need each other too  |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Janet Marie, Excellent work! "The room is filled with the thickeness of their apprehension.... neither one sure of the other one's true intention." 'Real people poetry', I call this! You write it so well! Joy |
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