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LenMcC1 Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 68 |
If I fall will you catch me? If I grieve will you console me? If I smile will you smile with me? If I love you will you love me? Everything I know Is nothing without a world to live in Everything I feel Is nothing without someone to touch me Everything I see Is nothing but a silhouette of a dream Hope to love Is not on my path Hope to hate Is somewhere on the way Hope to be lonely Was always a reality Knowing the truth Is a lie to myself Knowing how to live Is death to my soul Knowing her Is all I have Everything I know Is nothing without a world to live in Everything I feel Is nothing without someone to touch me Everything I see Is nothing but a silhouette of a dream |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Liked the structure throughtout this poem. I LOVE free verse with some structure. Shows creativity and intelligence. Very sad and poignant verse: Hope to love Is not on my path Hope to hate Is somewhere on the way Hope to be lonely Was always a reality Hope is such a delicate thing. -Sonje Chinese fortune cookie say: There are many unexpected & thrilling surprises in store for you. |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Yes, I like the structure here too, and how you made it free and not held down...let it flow... I feel the same way, without someone there to share in my happines, fear, love, then I am alone. Joy |
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