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devinmaria
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio

0 posted 2000-03-03 10:49 AM


windows are doors
to things we cannot share
the eyes to my soul
long for your presence there
effortless crys
hopelessly fall on deaf ears
thoughts of painful goodbyes
paralyzing come the tears
raging with anger
fills the emptyness inside
sheds light on dark corners
where loneliness hides
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 Trust I seek and I find in you.  Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters.  --Metallica

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devinmaria
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
1 posted 2000-03-03 10:50 AM


can anyone tell me how to edit please.  nevermind, i figured it out.  lol.  guess i just wasnt looking hard enough.  reply away!!!< !signature-->

 Trust I seek and I find in you.  Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters.  --Metallica

[This message has been edited by devinmaria (edited 03-03-2000).]

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-03-03 06:42 PM


windows are doors
to things we cannot share
the eyes to my soul
long for your presence there

devin, this is a beautiful poem, with perfect rhyme flow and the emotions are expressed beautifully. very nice work.
jm

 When you see through love's illusions, there lies the danger...
And your perfect lover just looks like a perfect fool
So you go running off in search of a perfect stranger
While the loneliness seems to spring from your life
Like a fountain from a pool.

Jackson Browne


devinmaria
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio
3 posted 2000-03-03 10:34 PM


thank you JM.  you alwyas have such nice things to say and im glad you enjoyed my poem.  thank you so much for your encouragement.

aimee


 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

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