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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Apparition giving me your hand Who knows where we go Vision as real as the sand See how easy it flows Take me up with your eyes Silence is shattered Break me down with your cries My thoughts are scattered Sprit wrapped in grey Tell me what you say Sprit tell me – who dies today? Memories still on my mind Distant voices echo ‘round Patiently stars keep their shine The light goes out with a sound Hand reaching for my heart Frost stops the flow Stand where time never starts Come with me, Banshee, let us go Spirit wrapped in grey Tell me what you’re trying to say Spirit tell me – who dies today? I can’t take my eyes off you Is it me you’re calling to? Vision blacker than the black Just what are you doing to me? Apparition I’ve got to get back Like light of day so I can see Haunting me, piercing the night With your shrieks of prophecy Taunting me, my skin goes white As you’re pointing down at me Spirit wrapped in grey Tell me what you say Sprit tell me – who dies today? It’s a mystery as I’m drawn nearer To the edge of a cliff Sits upon my soul, this shadowy fear My neck hairs grow stiff Apparition giving me your hand Who knows where we’ll go Vision as real as time’s sand Pulling me to the rocks below I can’t take my eyes off you It is me you’re calling to Spirit wrapped in grey What you’re trying to say, It is I who will die today [This message has been edited by JML (edited 02-29-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Apparition giving me your hand Who knows where we go Vision as real as the sand See how easy it flows Take me up with your eyes Silence is shattered Break me down with your cries My thoughts are scattered" wow...this is great in a haunted way, your intention I'm sure...the rhyme flow is smooth ... flows like butter(smile)... the use of the word apparition is perfect... some words were meant to be used in poems. thanks much for my latest fix  stalk ya later, JM You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name And know my love and my desperation were one and the same... Baby it's alright... Take this pain and all this sadness It's alright Take this rain You're going to be free... Jackson Browne *I love you baby* |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
i feel like a drug dealer doling out fixes...*L* This was originally meant to be a song, but kind of fizzled, musically that is. I love that you got the haunted aspect of this, and the apparition. |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
your poems form such vivid pictures in my mind. i love the way they force me to enter a world of darkness and dreary surroundings. its so clear. so scarry. Sprit wrapped in grey Tell me what you say Sprit tell me – who dies today? these lines are awesome. you style is so perfect for my reading eyse. thank you so much for sharing. aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Devin, that is a compliment indeed. To make your words accessible and vivid for someone else. |
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