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Prisoner Of Love
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Prisoner Of Love |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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PRISONER OF LOVE Caught in the act of thoughtless dreaming, The voice in my head in silence, screaming. I can still taste the poison of that word. Yet my actions wouldn't seem so drastic; If this world weren't so fake, so plastic In "Love", so seldom felt, so often heard. So as I Search for a new direction, The mirror shares a grayed reflection. A blurred visage of pain seen through a tear. With all emotion torn asunder, I stare through the rictus of wonder. Why is it all I love in life, I fear? It's an utter exoculation, Wandering this world in blind frustration. Emptiness snowballs to an avalanche of rage. Isolated from all other emotion, Spinning in the torrents of a black ocean, Every day sucked further down into this cage. So shamefully I tread this castle of disdain. Never finding the escape that relinquishes pain. And I cry out to the gods to cast down some light, But no one forgives in the deadness of night They spit on my face and curse me for my love, They ridicule me for what I can't rise above. They kill me with kindness, they spite me by fate. Then rebuke me for the return of their hate. Shackled to a wall in a dungeon of grief. An eternal prisoner of my own misbelief. By sin of such stature I could never atone, Savoring the darkness, I await Death, alone. Michael Anderson Love is more than just a words used too often, But too often, love is just a used word. |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
i really felt the second stanza. emotions that are too often said instead of felt, tend to lose their meaning. this reminded me of a conversation i recently had. while it is good to hear that you are loved, it is more important to FEEL that you are loved. another great piece that reaches beyond my mind and into emotion. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Wow michael, this knocked me off my feet, especially the last line. Savoring the darkness, I await Death, alone. This poem is incredible, but I have one minor curiosity: Is there any special reason you changed the structure and rhyming scheme for the last 3 stanzas? |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Mistikman - there was no real reason behind the switch - other than emotion in my surging as I got deeper and deeper into the poem. I had intended a softer poem but when it became evident I wasn't gonna accomplish that feat - I switched to the four line stanzas to pick up the beat of the poem and to hopefully drive home the impact in the ending. Glad you liked it. danni, Yeah - I think that stanza holds the meaning to this whole poem. Everything ties back to what is said/heard and what is truly felt. Thank you both for the compliments Michael |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"Caught in the act of thoughtless dreaming, The voice in my head in silence, screaming. I can still taste the poison of that word. Yet my actions wouldn't seem so drastic; If this world weren't so fake, so plastic In "Love", so seldom felt, so often heard. So as I Search for a new direction, The mirror shares a grayed reflection. A blurred visage of pain seen through a tear. With all emotion torn asunder, I stare through the rictus of wonder. Why is it all I love in life, I fear?" WOW M, Im with Mystik,this one blows me away...the emotions scream out in every line,and the truth of them as well, but also what caught my attention was the very difficult to do--rhyme pattern. It's very hard to carry the last line rhyme down to the next verse and keep the idea and meaning in order... But then... you are the master(smile)...and the changing of the flow worked perfectly to finsh out the emotions. another lesson of poetic wisdom...take a bow  jmYou're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name And know my love and my desperation were one and the same... Baby it's alright... Take this pain and all this sadness It's alright Take this rain You're going to be free... Jackson Browne *I love you baby* |
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Maya the Brokenhearted Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 66 |
Michael...I love this. But then I always love your stuff. Need a shoulder? I have 2  ~Maya |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Michael, Can this boy write...or can he write!! This was most excellent. Every poem I read of yours makes me cry, but that's okay..the emotions are so real, so powerful!! Jan took the words out of my mouth. I was going to comment on the difficult task of the type of rhyming you did in this piece. I have tried to take a rhyme that ends the verse and continue it onto the next verse...but it never works out right. I sit in humbleness for you did it and made it look so EASY...and now michael i write something for you, sweet sweet michael love has not left you, i promise you that it will find you and be yours when you least expect it, and thats a simple fact destiny and fate shall surely play a hand and then you shall feel everlasting love, that is so grand but until then please do not give up hope, do not give up on what is right keep holding on one more day and always fight, fight fight Much respect, Amy < !signature-->~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ [This message has been edited by Aimster (edited 02-29-2000).] |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
I do so love the poem. The worst is when you know someone loves you, and you feel it with every fiber of your being, but for whatever reason, it doesn't work out. There you stand alone, asking WHY! Kelly I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Excellent as always Michael. Just one comment You will never stand alone as long as you call me friend. Though I am not exactly what you are searching for, my friendship will never fail you. |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
I am, as always, in poetic awe. (picture eyes tinged a bit green with envy) i am simply astounded by your grasp of the english language and your use of vocabulary. your poems are always an excellent read and this one is no different. jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
(kneeling on knees, yelling, "i'm not worthy, i'm not worthy") great poem oh master of rhyme and verse. i enjoyed the flow and the pattern and the pick up at the end. i am in awe of such a master as you. in awe as usual. aimee Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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