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blueyz75
Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 138
IL

0 posted 2000-02-26 07:46 PM

The dark desolate tomb held her soul.
No lock or key would free it.
Who placed the boulder there, no one knows.
For she says he shall remain nameless.
Yet in her mind, he is vivid.
As real as life can be.
Flaming red hair and mysterious eyes.
Burning into her soul, laying her naked.
Just as she was to confess,
confess to him her emotions,
the boulder dropped.
It found its mark.
And she was left alone.
Broken hearted,
Locked in a desolate tomb.

Kelly Maria Kosa
February 26, 2000

I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-02-26 07:59 PM

you have perfect timing...
I was just reading your replies to my poems...sorry to make ya relate so much...guess we've traveled down some of the same paths...and tripped over the same rocks...

this poem is very good, great imagery...so descriptively expressed...nice job...more more...

...there are places inside all our souls...
that have never been touched...
there are places inside our hearts...
that need to be loved this much...
Janet Marie

*I miss you baby...
I love you, always.*

childomine
Senior Member

since 2000-01-25

Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL

2 posted 2000-02-26 08:05 PM

How terrible is the emptiness we feel when we give our love only to have our heart handed back to us in tiny, little pieces. It's amazing how such a wonderful emotion (love) can leave one devastated and feeling like they have been left to live in an empty, "desolate tomb". You have spoken well of a pain that we have all felt.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

3 posted 2000-02-27 02:21 AM

This was a great analagy, Well done

May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2000-02-27 08:06 AM

A very interesting way to describe the process one goes thru for a broken heart. James

Jannel
Member

since 2000-01-18

Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

5 posted 2000-02-27 06:10 PM

wonderful description and great metaphor.
jannel

"I'm just saying
that we've mistaken one
for thousands of words,
and for that mistake
I've caused you such pain
that I damn that word."
-10000 Maniacs "Jezebel"

blueyz75
Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 138
IL

6 posted 2000-02-29 07:00 PM

Well thanks guys, here I stand humble with my hat in hands (that is if I wore one). My writing comes from somewhere in here. Thank God it comes out. Otherwise I'd be downright miserable all the time!

hehe

Kelly

I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman

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