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SEA
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with you

0 posted 2000-02-23 09:34 AM



All alone
with my pain
staring out the window
seeing only rain

Nothing left of my soul
not an ounce of life
between my shoulders
I've found your knife

The foolish one
I thought you so nice
you stabbed me not once
but twice

How blind
I must be
I actually thought
you loved me
-SEA-

*this was something a friend of mine was going through,I wrote this after she told me her pain.


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Björn
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since 2000-02-08
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Münster, Germany
1 posted 2000-02-23 10:36 AM


SEA: That puts into words what I feel right now. I´d like to say: well done!
Sometimes it´s really hard to see that words can also build up to something nice and optimistic  

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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2 posted 2000-02-23 01:16 PM


great poem SEA..perfect rhyme...
inspiration from a friends pain...did you show them this? very nice work.
take care, janet marie

 ...every moment of every day...
your still with me in every way.
every poem and song...
every rhyme and verse...
your still here...like a beautiful curse.

Janet Marie

*I miss you baby...
I love you, always.*



mystery
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since 2000-02-21
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3 posted 2000-02-23 01:19 PM


This poem is so inspirational for all of us, sometimes we play the fool for love and there is nothing wrong with that. It does become a problem when you are the fool all of the time, I hope that your friend has gotten over the relationship, tell her to move on for me!!!
JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2000-02-23 03:23 PM


Sea this is excellent.  It so perfectly describes how foolish we are sometimes and how we are deceived by our feelings of love.  James
Isis
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Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
5 posted 2000-02-24 05:39 PM


Sea this was wonderful, perfect descriptions of the feelings of rejection etc we all feel when love goes wrong.  

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Michael
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6 posted 2000-02-25 07:33 AM


I certainly can relate.  It's a hard slap in the face when you realize just how foolish you can be sometimes.  Glad it wasn't written for you, though.

Michael

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