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~Venus~
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since 2000-01-27
Posts 128


0 posted 2000-02-19 07:26 PM


Okay guys, this is off the top of my head...here goes!

why can't I love you?
why can't I be with you?
why do they say that you are wrong?
why do they say that they are right?
why did you leave?
why did I let you leave?
why do you have to be the one for me?
why do you make it so difficult?
why is there a barrier between us?
why is the invisible wall there?

why ask why?
why not just let yourself free, and be uninhibited?

these are the questions that really matter...


 ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~

*She loves, she's Love, and yet she is not lov'd*

© Copyright 2000 ~Venus~ - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-02-20 12:27 PM


why ask why??..because as you say...these are the questions that really matter...
great job...good declaration of feelings.
take care, janet marie

 Now for me some words come easy...
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch.
You never knew what I loved in you--
I don't know what you loved in me...
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be...
How long have I been sleeping-
How long have I been drifting alone through the night...
How long have I've dreaming I could make it right...
If I closed my eyes and tried with all my might
To be the one you need...
Jackson Browne



JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2000-02-20 01:51 PM


You know what Venus when I read a poem that the writer states is just off the top of their head or they threw it together in just a few minutes after they stepped out of the shower, and so forth (laugh), I usually find that the poem reflects this precisely.  However, in this particular situation I find this to be excellent.   How do you do that?  I have to work with my writing..but I love working with my thoughts as I try to figure out how to put down on paper the thoughts I am thinking in my mind.      James
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 2000-02-20 07:53 PM


Why does the sun shine?  That's about as easy to answer too!  Well done Venus, for a quicky job this is excellent..

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-02-20 07:53 PM


Why does the sun shine?  That's about as easy to answer too!  Well done Venus, for a quicky job this is excellent..

 May the world hug you today,
With it's warmth and love.
I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart,
That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world,
Wishing you well and
wishing you love......
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



TanAngel
Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168
Oviedo, Florida, USA
5 posted 2000-02-21 08:57 PM


I ask myself a lot of these questions myself. Very well written!

 "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel

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