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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
Have you ever felt that feeling... Heartfelt and warm... Had your heart beating... Ever thought so hard your head hurts... Engulfed in thoughts full of emotion... Emersed with visions left to an expert... Listened to a song and cried till you couldnt cry no more... Listening as a tear fell slowly onto the floor... Lingering feelings in your soul, tightly stored... Pleaded to God, "please take me away from this world..." Peered deep within yourself and... Pictured yourself in heaven, perfect like a pearl. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is very emotion filled and expressive... this poem is a "perfect pearl"...please dont be in such a hurry to leave..theres so much left to experience and be inspired about...then you can write more beautiful poems like this one...take care, janet marie |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
Interesting form. I like it. Jannel "I'm just saying that we've mistaken one for thousands of words, and for that mistake I've caused you such pain that I damn that word." -10000 Maniacs "Jezebel" |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I think I'd have to say yes on all counts. Even listening as I watched a tear fall to the floor. Time seems to slow in such moments for me - is it like that with you? Great poem!!! Michael |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I've been there too, time does seem to slow and things that are real seem surreal. Great work!!  May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Interesting emotions you express-ill. if your looking for help you have found the perfect place! "Falling in love is just that - falling. Sometimes you merely trip and stub your toe. Sometimes you fall to your hands and knees. But sometimes you smack your head against the pavement and die." |
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