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gypsyqlt
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since 2000-02-08
Posts 147
Bradford,Vt USA

0 posted 2000-02-09 03:45 PM


WHAT PAIN IS THIS ?

What pain is this,
as searing daggers, tearing me apart?

What pain is this,
that leaves me weak and trembling from the start?

Is this the pain of love I feel?
A love whose life must end ?

Or is this blinding agony -The Gods,
as they pretend?

What pain is this,
as searing daggers, tearing me apart?

"This is the pain" The Gods have said,
"Of the breaking of your heart"


Jocelyn Galvano-Pickett 2/9/2000


© Copyright 2000 Jocelyn Galvano-Pickett - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-02-09 04:34 PM


gypsy..sorry for the pain..but the poem is great...very Shakespeare and gothic like...
janet marie


 "...she said I dont know if I've ever been good enough...I'm a little bit rusty...and I feel like my head is caving in,
and I dont know if I've ever been really loved- by a hand thats touched me, and I feel like somethings gonna give...and I'm a little bit angry...
Well...this aint over..NO not yet...not while I still need you around"...
matchbox 20


Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
2 posted 2000-02-09 05:59 PM


Good use of repitition. I like the ending.
Jannel


 "I'm just saying
that we've mistaken one
for thousands of words,
and for that mistake
I've caused you such pain
that I damn that word."
-10000 Maniacs "Jezebel"



Bronx
Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 84
Oviedo, Florida, U.S.
3 posted 2000-02-09 06:01 PM


OOOOOOOOH!-
I like it very much.  In fact I love it.  Very thought provoking.  I really like this!
I really like this.  I re.....Well....Uhh!
Poetically yours
Bronx


 Be careful!
It's a jungle out there!


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