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The Battle
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The Battle |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
The Battle My eyes snap open, I find myslef in a pool of tears It's hard to breathe 'cause the end is near I open my windoe And crawl outside As I look up at the stars I see only your eyes A blank picture enters my mind Humanity is blind It has never played a role in my life The battle has just begun I have no way to run No way to hide I had no ententions to do that Come little children hide from your greatest fears The battle is here It is unspoken The scares are not shown to the eyes If you look close you could see I'm about to cry For this battle is not flesh or blood Not for the ears Or for my eyes My mind is racing looking for the answer My soul it's sword in hand... "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
well done. the battles within are the hardest to fight. but yeild the greatest rewards. Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Be ever valiant with the inner battles, for when you have victory then you reap the rewards. Well done, great imagery..  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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~Venus~ Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128 |
Hey. Good poem. My computer's fixed! ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~ |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
tan angel...those were very powerful words... i loved the end... my soul it's sword in hand... see more of you around... you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Enjoyed reading your poem! and keep that sword handy, dragons are everywhere. Good work! DH |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
very strong poem...very well written and expressed.lots of imagery in this one too. good work, as always!! take care janet marie ..."when you walked into the room...I saw their faces--- did you know--you made it seem like time was standing still... and I felt---fascination...though I only knew you then--just casually... then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart gave me away".... Glass Tiger |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Do you ever worry replying to often makes you repeat yourself that you end up writeing the same things over and over again do what i do add a little poem on the bottom of replies (a pertinent to the main poem peice is always good brilliant poem by the way. When my sword lies shattered by my side and all around my friends have died and blood pours from my eyes then the battle has lost all pride. When the darkness with you rides when your hearts explodes inside and you no-longer recognise those who fight by your side then the battle is lost, so hide. Pride of place in the human race goes to one without a trace, of subtlety style ego or grace for this position, I wish to say, i would be proud as i am greater than any other face in the crowd |
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Bronx Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 84Oviedo, Florida, U.S. |
Wow- I really liked this one TanAngel. It was really good. No better! It was great! Wonderful, Spectacular...... See ya to....Blah blah blah! Poetically yours Bronx Be careful! It's a jungle out there! |
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Lady Bere Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73Valmeyer, Illinois USA |
Great poem. What a wonderful expression of those personal battles that no one else sees. |
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