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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL 
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Obedient Oblivion She drove a 1988 Esquire station wagon with the driver's side window stuck in the Up position which is best because it kept the elements safe from her life of taking kids to school ten minutes before the bell, laundry on Mondays, keeping the beer cold and the remote where it should be Except a window stuck in the Up position cannot keep out the numbness of lonely nights staring at the ceiling weeping under heavy breathing… alcohol laden while she dreamed of coming home parking the wagon in the garage leaving the engine running. Robert hi....I am new here to this forum....I come from Open #'s 3,4,5 & 6 [This message has been edited by RobertB (edited 02-06-2000).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome Robert! I have read some of your work from OP forums. I enjoyed this a lot, suburban nightmare, well done  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Thanks Isis....I think that I could like Dark Passions! |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Welcome. I enjoyed this piece very much. So easily does one get stuck in the rut of an unhappy routine of life-left to feel like there's no way out. I look forward to more of your postings here. And hope you do like dark passions. Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
Very enjoyed this. Especially the recurring image of the window and the phrase "keeping the elements safe from her life." Jannel |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Robert, this poem touched me...you have described someone I know perfectly with your well written expressions and imagery. I love the meanings and metaphores used with the broken car window,very good. Welcome to this forum. take care janet marie ..."when you walked into the room...I saw their faces--- did you know--you made it seem like time was standing still... and I felt---fascination...though I only knew you then--just casually... then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart gave me away".... Glass Tiger |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
This is a side I didn't know from you yet Robert. This one touched me....a great poem Robert. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Thanks!! This poem is from an experience I saw in a drive through at McDonald's. This girl in front of me was driving this Esquire Wagon and the window was stuck up and she had to open the door to pay the cashier. When she leaned out to hand the money to the window it dropped on the ground and she had to lean down to pick it all up. I felt very sorry for her and this poem came to me and I wrote it when I got home. Robert |
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