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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
First, I would like to say that I know this is not dark at all, but this is the only board on witch I post, so I feel more comfortable posting it here. < !signature-->Second, I don't think this would be inappropriate, but if it is found to be, I will completely understand if it is locked or deleted. It was kind of inspired by a few "passionate" poems that I have read on here as well as some other things. So with that said, here goes!  You place your hand gently upon my face and pull me close with the other wrapped around my waist You stop for a moment to look at me the depth of your eyes consumes me I feel the warmth of your breath on my lips for the first time tasting sweet Love's kiss Your tenderness so powerfull and overwhelming Your touch so delicate not felt on my skin but reaches more deeply to the yearning within Your heart beats so closely to mine sharing the rythm as our bodies combine I tremble... I am taken to another place.. a divine plane with our souls entwined We are released and I realize I have waited my whole life for this moment for you We were meant to be soulmates.... for all time Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- [This message has been edited by danni (edited 02-05-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Danni, this is SO beautiful and I dont think anyone will think otherwise(my guess) its romantic and tasteful...and after all... this is Passions...(smile) I really was moved by this lovely moment you shared. janet marie ..."when you walked into the room...I saw their faces--- did you know--you made it seem like time was standing still... and I felt---fascination...though I only knew you then--just casually... then you slowly turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart gave me away".... Glass Tiger |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
thank you JM. i thought it was pretty tasteful too. kind of my rendition of what the act of love should be......so much deeper than the physical. thanks again!  Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
i must say this is simply a wonderful poem danni love is not only physical it's more about the soul  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nicely romantic danni...a very smooth and enjoyable poem... I think we are all looking for our soulmates...well I know I am. James |
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Keli1019 Junior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 31FL |
A beautiful poem Danni! I loved it! It had so much emotion behind, and was very true. I can't wait to read your next poem! "It takes a minute to have a crush on someone, an hour to like someone and a day to love someone- but it takes a lifetime to forget someone." |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
creature-i agree, if the soul is not involved, it is not love. thank you. jmlee-we all have our soulmates-you will find yours, when the time is right. thanx for the nice comments. keli- thanx to you too, for the nice comments. they are all greatly appreciated! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Danni: This poem is not inappropriate at all, it is beautiful. Everyone strives to have this kind of love. And yes, you are right, love is not only physical but the sharing of two souls too. Very moving and tastefully written. Just perfect! Applause! take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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Alina Le Ann Junior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 40INDIANA |
WOW!! This is great! I'm much impressed Thanks for sharing Alina Le Ann |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
"souls intertwined"... *sigh* what a moment that will be. beautiful danni. Jannel |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
thanks to all for the wonderfully kind comments! Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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~Venus~ Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 128 |
Well, if anyone dare deems this poem inappropriate, than I am pleased to know that I have had the immense honor of reading this great work of art before they delete it. What can I say, I'm a sappy romantic at heart...I think that sentence pretty much covers my feelings! Keep up the great work! ~goddess of love, passion, and desire~ |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
well tahnks bunches venus. i suppose you can tell-i also am a hopeless romantic. (and there is nothing sappy about being romantic!) Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
i'm reminded of my soulmate... very well written...so romantic...and even more sensuous... i loved it... see you around you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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gypsyqlt Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 147Bradford,Vt USA |
Verrrryyyy niceeee. Made me want to close my eyes....Jocelyn |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Great poem, danni. I got a little kick out of your disclaimer. This may not be a dark poem but it certainly is one about coming out of the dark. I know how enlightening it can be to find the one who is your soulmate...you captured this so well in this poem. Who would possibly lock down the thread on such a wonderful piece. michael |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Avanti-thank you for your comments. i was going for romantic and sensuous. Jocelyn-Lol at closing your eyes. i guess that means this had the effect i was going for! Micheal-you are comppletely right about enlightenment. thank you very much. (about locking the thread, i had to edit this a little before i put it up as is, but still wasn't sure) thanks again |
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