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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Uninvited... Listening you your silence...you hear me talk... You remain flattered...by my fascination for you... While I remain shattered... A kid and a man...knocking...at your door Still I remain uninvited... Are you looking in your mirror...? What do you see? I see the reflections...of all those times... While you're listening to that song... I'm surrounded by the darkness...that you left me behind... Still I remain uninvited... You said you’d call...so I waited... My mind said...you could not... My heart begged to differ... While You’re out again... Still I remain uninvited… Is this an illusion...I’m tired anyway... What has become...of us...? Tossing and turning...should I be? Your dining...and there’s another lunch... Still I remain uninvited... you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Keli1019 Junior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 31FL |
I thought this was an excellent poem. I know exactly where you're coming from when you wrote this. I love reading all of your poems, and I am really looking forward to reading your next one! Keep up the great work!!  )"It takes a minute to have a crush on someone, an hour to like someone and a day to love someone- but it takes a lifetime to forget someone." |
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Keli1019 Junior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 31FL |
I just want to say, that I really need to learn how to use the smiley's in here!! I don't smoke, just to let everyone know. I think I'd better learn how to use these boards before I do anything else.  THere, that should be a little better. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
thanx for understanding keli...and guess what??? i wanna learn to use the smiley's myself...i keep clicking on them and they won't happen for me... you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Avanti, this is SO good...I really related to the emotions of this one...sometimes love leaves us so uncertain... I love this line... "You remain flattered...by my fascination for you... While I remain shattered..." VERY nice work and thanks SO much for all your kind and supportive encouragement of my work. take care janet marie Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme, They are not measured by the commitment of time. Some emotions run too deep to be described by words, Forgiveness and understanding- remain the most beautiful words ever heard. Janet Marie |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
this really a good one as far as i can say and relate to co'z it's a part of life that happens to many of us.... excellent job Avanti  |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
i agree with all, excellent piece, easily related too. Something has to change. An undeniable dilemma. But I am not a burden anyone should bear. -Tool- |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
Great poem!! I really enjoyed and can relate...I think. I also need to learn how to get the smilys...I have no clue how!!! "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel |
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