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sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member

since 1999-12-03

Posts 872
just about where I want to be

0 posted 2000-02-01 02:28 PM

Seeing nothing
Hatting the darkness
Adjusting to the lonliness
Deep inside my heart
Out of the ashes
Whirls a kind of peace
Sleep my dying heart

First poem I posted in this forum..most of my others are in Teen Poetry #2...but this one is better suited for this forum. It is also posted in the above forum

~~Lavada

"Superiority to fate is difficult to learn. 'Tis not conferred by any, but possible to earn"--Emily Dickinson-"Superiority of Fate"

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

1 posted 2000-02-01 04:27 PM

Well done Lavada...very discriptive and yet very short. Don't worry though...your heart is never truly dead unless you allow it to be so. Once again...very nice.

"They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

2 posted 2000-02-01 04:34 PM

I love your last line "sleep my dying heart", as if you're saying "hush, hush, my child".
A very good poem.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

3 posted 2000-02-01 05:14 PM

I love the last line too, but for a different reason, if you don't comfort it, who will? Well done.

Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)

TanAngel
Member

since 2000-02-01

Posts 168
Oviedo, Florida, USA

4 posted 2000-02-01 05:19 PM

That poem is great...short and sweet then again who am I be talkin' about short?

sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member

since 1999-12-03

Posts 872
just about where I want to be

5 posted 2000-02-02 09:55 AM

thanks to all the replies! I really appreciated it!

~~Lavada

"Superiority to fate is difficult to learn. 'Tis not conferred by any, but possible to earn"--Emily Dickinson-"Superiority of Fate"

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