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baerlon
Member

since 2000-01-14

Posts 197
Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA

0 posted 2000-01-31 12:56 PM

I lie here alone in the dark
As I watch the shadows dancing in the night
I wonder what it is I did
Chained and shackled my virtue fades
No soul screams louder than thou
My crusade of despair writes no end
A vision shows a picture I painted
A prison shown built by my regret
Walls of despair surround my life
Gates of sorrow lie before my fate
Now I realize as I lie here
There is no star to guide my heart
As I watch the shadows dancing in the night

I just realized an error in my poem. It is Suppose to be gates of sorrow lie, not gates of lie. Sorry about that it was late last night when i posted it.

baerlon
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There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
(Creed)
baerlon

[This message has been edited by baerlon (edited 01-31-2000).]

childomine
Senior Member

since 2000-01-25

Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL

1 posted 2000-01-31 07:51 AM

Filled with lonliness as I read your poem. In our quest for peace we are all too often our own worst enemy.

Jannel
Member

since 2000-01-18

Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

2 posted 2000-01-31 01:05 PM

Beautiful depiction of despair. The last lines are very moving.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

3 posted 2000-01-31 05:21 PM

Keep aiming towards the light hon, the blurrs lessons and within it is that sought after happiness.
Liked this great descriptionsl..

Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-01-31 08:18 PM

this poem is sad, but very beautifully written and touching, as well as emotionally descriptive...only someone with a talented "soul" could have written it. Thank you for sharing it,Take care, janet marie

Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-
remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
Janet Marie

baerlon
Member

since 2000-01-14

Posts 197
Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA

5 posted 2000-02-01 09:55 AM

Thank you all, this was in my haed for a while but I could notfind the words. The other day I stopped thinking about it and just wrote it. I am glad you enjoyed it.
baerlon

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
(Creed)
baerlon

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

6 posted 2000-02-01 02:47 PM

You use some great imagery here ! Enjoyed this poem a lot.

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

7 posted 2000-02-01 04:14 PM

Very nicely done....loved the imagery and the beauty in this. Your heart does not need a star to guide it...it guides itself....you just have to listen carefully.

"They can take away my belongings. They can beat me. They can torchure me and they can kill me. Then they will have my dead body. But they will not have my obedience."
-Gandhi

~*Angel of Darkness*~

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

8 posted 2000-02-02 10:20 AM

Walls of despair surround my life
Gates of sorrow lie before my fate
Now I realize as I lie here
There is no star to guide my heart
As I watch the shadows dancing in the night

Wrought with great descriptions.
I enjoyed the read. Thanks

Jennifer

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