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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
I can see it, plain as dreams. I'm walking alone on the beach at night. The sand gives a little under my feet, not really so much that I leave footprints, and wherever I do, they are quickly washed away by the crashing waves that come to nibble at my toes. And it mirrors my life. Not the way the ocean mirrors the pale moon, But the way that it all gets washed away. |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
What a great wrap up! Nice work Wendy! If this were CA (I might suggest a honing~just a bit) but the imagery and the way you all bring it together-FABULOUS! "I shall leave nothing before matchsticks." |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beautiful Wendy, an ocean themed poems are always a winner with me!!  Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I loved this Wendy! I also thought it was a great way to wrap up the poem using the ending line you did. "...the way that it all gets washed away." I am looking forward to more of your work!!!! JOY |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
I never wanted to say suc a thing but this is lacking more. I apologize but this one is remarkable and I think it could use more. Please do not be mad but enthuised to write more on these thoughts!!!! Once again I'm sorry I'f I offended but I was left with AND? "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
Oh, I know the feeling. When I finished this one, I felt it wasn't exactly finished, but I was drawing a blank on what else could be done, so I stopped. |
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