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a challenge from kitcat (words she gave me)
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a challenge from kitcat (words she gave me) |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
Entered....the unfamiliar place known To fullfill the emptiness... thats grown Ordered a nectar that drives sane men mad Effrontery as I am they give me what I'd have The Miller Lite so smooth and needed And within all it's splendor it was so greeted I encompass many more to come.....and come...and come....come As my inner thrones liver becomes so callous I drive thru the crowd in such a malice Upon the scene of a long awaited time I yell 'FIRE' to cut length in line Transfixed as all are I bolted to a stall And perversely spray upon all it's walls Oh how I feel as this urge slowly went away And the ablation within was almost at final fey ............................. SMACK!!!!!!!!! an eruption occured The door spun wide open and then I heard "You must leave now you drunken fool" But wait!!!!!! I thought I was cool And out I went to crawl again the lonely street But I put one over on them; The check, they can keep!!!!! hahahahahahahahahahahaha Entered......the unfamiliar place known < !signature--> "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) [This message has been edited by Bojopy (edited 01-13-2000).] |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
This brought a deep chuckle...I don't know what I would do to improve on it simply beacuse you captured the depths of a malady (that maybe is too close to me from sometime ago) But, I'll tell you...the last line took all the pain away and left me laughing (and that's good!) BIG THANKIES BoJopy |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
I was trying to be funny and sad at the same time and I think it worked!! oh yeah read kitcat's challenge in her poem dangit I cant remember I'll be back< !signature--> "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) [This message has been edited by Bojopy (edited 01-13-2000).] |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
dirty molecules ^^^^^^^^^^^^^ "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
I liked it  . Nice work. You used the words and made it work. Hope you had fun at it. |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
kitcat I would appreciate anytime if you want to give me such words to write about!!! I want to challenge you if you see this --- let me know ... just respond to my first submission A New God !!!!!!!!!! OK till then I hope MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!! "Write down what you say if what you say is not written down" (Bojopy) |
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