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Niemczak Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 51 |
The building once tall and strong Lay crumbled upon the ground Years of neglect and memories Lay amongst the rubble Cries of anguish and pain Lay hidden amongst the soil Tears that once fell from a face Now dried upon the floor Pleas of a child wishing to be left alone Echo silently off the walls Begging once offered to the man Lay unanswered upon the hay covered floor The scent of animals still linger Where there used to be stalls Feelings of Pain and Sorrow Live within the walls Long ago fallen Years have passed The rubble still there The cries still echo From a child long ago Dreams still come Night after night Casting their shadows Upon a lighted wall The sounds still haunt Those fragile memeories As the older child Lie crying The years go by Memories stand still Waiting for the time When the void gets filled Walls built up from long ago Slowly crumble From a gentle soul Who has taken its place |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Well if that is what the building endured better it lies in ruins.. glad there was a spark of hope at the end!!  Reach inside your heart, that is the greatest gift you can bestow. Merry Christmas.. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Good poem. My childhood was very painful and your poem just spoke to me. Your poem does give me hope, thank you for writing a poem like this. * Melissa Honeybee * |
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Niemczak Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 51 |
It wasn't something that was easily written. I have been working on this one for over 13 years. I am glad that I finally finished it. Thank you. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Having recently written a poem that's taken years to put down on paper, I can appreciate the courage it took to post. It's the poetry that is so hard to write that absolutely MUST come out. Powerful message! It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Niemczak Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 51 |
When I posted my first poem, I was scared to death, Now though I am in shock that I have allowed people to see who I am. |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
It would seem to me that courage is your middle name. GREAT work. -RS There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief - Hendrix |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
very good. . . sometimes the words are there, but we must wait for them to show us what they want to say. . . 13 years or a thousand. . . excellent work my friend. .. thank you for letting us see who you are. . . That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Niemczak Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 51 |
Keep this up and I am going to start crying!!! Sometimes I hate being sensitive. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
It's good to be sensitive...you do have immense courage. Maybe someday I'll have the strength to write the things about my past that need to be written most. For now I'll admire your incredible work. *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Niemczak Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 51 |
For me the hardest part was having to finally face it, and and deal with it. As for being sensitive, there are times when I don't like it because I was raised that showing your feelings is a sign of weekness. And it is hard for me to be anything but strong. Alot of conflict within me there. |
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winterinblue Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 32 |
Oh, this is a poignant and haunting poem - strong, and tender, sorrowful and delicately worded. Excellent work! "Through everything, remain your own good friend; and so crucially, paint it all with words!" |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Hey showing emotion is definitely NOT a weakness. It is a strongness, a wonderful quality. Only a truly intouch and strong person, can cry and say what their problems are. It is the weak who hide it. People saying what your parents did and raising you that way only anger me, soory. But you have courage, you have already broken the cycle. I am so pleased you did too.. ((HUGS)) At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato) ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Niemczak Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 51 |
Thank you Isis. Right now I am putting something together for my twin sister. As soon as I finish it I will post it here. Thank you to everyone for the words of encouragement and hope. I really do appreciate it. |
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medusa Junior Member
since 1999-12-09
Posts 23 |
a haunting piece reminiscing the past! beautiful yet so sad. |
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