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Dark Poetry #1

A Simple Realization

~Red~
Junior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 36
chicago, Ill-na, u.s.a.

0 posted 1999-12-13 10:37 PM

I can see the pain
coming from their eyes
I can feel the disgust
pelting from their lies
A world in front of her
Waiting patiently,
She wonders how it would be
If she were to be set free
A million feathers drifting
The stars on an oblivious stand
Now merely....sliding...shifting
towards his radiance
so pure
so true
so honest
now if they were to be
Clearly and undeniably
set free
What would you say?
How could you not feel it?
His perfection
glowing over me
Shimmering deeply
as lovers thoughts would be
if only he could understand
that in her
something was broken underneath
she was so fragile
a landslide
and even though
you try and you try
to make things right
it just gives away
in the nite
and as the heavens above us
A million shades of grey
bring down upon us
i feel your presence
around me
yet i cannot seem to find you
then an icy glove
falls upon me
and i realize
that i've died

~Why is it that you beleive in perfection my friend? For perfection is a dream, it shall never be acheived. So tell me why you beleive in perfection?....For PErfection doesn't exist..~

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

1 posted 1999-12-13 10:53 PM

Wow this is wonderful work. For each reader it will pull them in and seem as though you are speaking about their stuff personally!!! Wonderful!! Bravo

What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

~Red~
Junior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 36
chicago, Ill-na, u.s.a.

2 posted 1999-12-13 10:57 PM

ahh...well, thanx very much!! ur soo nice!

~Why is it that you beleive in perfection my friend? For perfection is a dream, it shall never be acheived. So tell me why you beleive in perfection?....For PErfection doesn't exist..~

danni
Senior Member

since 1999-11-20

Posts 688
wisconsin

3 posted 1999-12-14 01:39 AM

Very powerful. Isis was right. I definately felt like i was reading the story of me. Great work Red!

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