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Blow Out The Candle
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Blow Out The Candle |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
During the night someone else’s memories turn into starlight. Images from past lives make me want to scream. Half remembered faces brush against my cheek. Just at the end of the dream, cries of passion brush against my ears. On the street, the screams of death fall into the ocean. The trees have turned to dust. Is the world still standing? The river carries dreams away. Wool socks and scarves aren’t important anymore. Just as I thought I would love you forever there is no love left. Is this really the end? Stare into the darkness of my dream Taste my pain and you will become me, here in the house of death where everyone calls your name. I lost my name somewhere, in the woods, amongst the ashes of the trees, finally turned to dust. Now your question arrives at last, Does love really exist? And the last of the screaming stops. The world is only a dream. Blow out the candle on life, Before closing your eyes. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hi time prophet Welcome to Passions. Your words were very interesting and produced some amazing images. I'll look forward to reading more from you. Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hello and welcome to Passions. I hope that you enjoy yourself here. It's a really nice place with a lot of friendly people. I enjoyed your first post and look forward to more. Hugs, Ethel |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
The world is only a dream. Blow out the candle on life, Before closing your eyes. I hope not...  Welcome, tp...hope you enjoy reading some of the words posted here... and thank you...I appreciate your kindness, always. Maureen |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
During the night someone else’s memories turn into starlight. ~*~ This starts out so nice... and ends up a frightening dream... well done, and Welcome to Passions! Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close... |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
Suetang, Thank you for the read. garysgirl, Thanks for the welcome, have been registered here for some time, just no time to put fingers to keyboard. nakdthoughts, just some old stuff going around in ever diminishing circles. Sunshine, thank you for the comments. |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
nice work time pro , the last three lines stuck around after reading them  -wolf |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
 the poem progressed into something unexpected, dreams can be a frightening thing..whether theyre nightmares or goals left unaccomplished. hope to see more of you here. |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
aujussy wolf, wasn't too sure about those lines but it seemed to work, thanks for the read. |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
muted, nice welcome thank you. I am not a prolific writer, don't get enough time to do so, but more will come. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I too look forward to reading more of your work. This piece is thought provoking in many ways. Welcome to Passions. |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
honeybunch, too much red when written, wouldn't place any second thoughts on it H. |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Time Prophet, Lots of intersting ideas here with imagery. I particularly like your last lines. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Welcome! quatro |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
quatro, Pleased you enjoyed it, thank you for the welcome. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Time Prophet -- enjoyed your writing and will be watching for more. Welcome to PIP! |
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GlisteningRain Member
since 2004-05-06
Posts 103The clouds |
night...memories...starlight. Very cool. It's me...B. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Excellent! I enjoyed this very much! ~~Yo Way Yo Home Vah Yah Ray Vyo Way Rah Jarume Brunnen_G~~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
glad to have you here! what a poem! I loved it! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! I don't believe I had a chance to greet you before. Very well done first post. I look forward to seeing more of your work. Please check your email for a special greeting. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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pictureme Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 248Ohio, USA |
timeprophet Welcome to passions. This seemed like a nightmare in the very dark.... The last lines fit perfect and leaves the reader bewildered. nicely done and I look forward to reading more! pictureme :-) |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
GlisteniningRain, Nice to know you enjoyed. JamesMichael, Thank you for reading. TerryW, Thanks Terry. passingshadows, Nice to know it was appreciated. Enchantress, Thank you for the warm welcome, nice place here. pictureme, Somtimes things just go round and round until you spit them out. Glad you enjoyed. |
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