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Beyond the Obvious
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Beyond the Obvious |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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Why should I fly? What does the sky hold beyond the obvious wisps of clouds and the occasional echo of migrating ducks escaping winter's scowl? What worth is there in wishes for wings? I’m not built for feathers or halos or kite strings or other elusive things that don’t fit in my comfort zone. I’m connected from the ground up and it’s only whimsy that keeps my roots from settling deeper; besides I prefer crawling on my belly through the dirt. Call it primal or maybe filthy, but I know where I am and I know I can’t fall ~from here~ I’m at the base, the bottom beginnings and endings and I'll be damned if the ashes call for me. I’m going to lay right here and listen to footsteps eroding me on their climb to the top. I'll be here waiting to catch falling satellites, ‘cause what goes up will always come down; somewhere, somehow. But there’s no shame in open arms they're all we have, and grasping sand can be just as poetic as gracing the winds. Things look a lot less lofty from here But at least I know it’s real and reality was all I ever needed. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love flying...and I love being grounded too (just not in the airport waiting for take-off) great write love the ending verse |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
muted, I really like the idea behind this! YOu expressed everything so well-loved the part compared the grasping sand to the gracing winds. Your last three lines complete it nicely. Sadie |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Things look a lot less lofty from here But at least I know it’s real and reality was all I ever needed." Wonderful write Dawn...I too prefer to be grounded. Very much enjoyed, and love the ending. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
While I was reading this I thought, muted is lady who cannot be pigeon-holed and lives her life how she sees fit. Enjoyed! |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful! Eric |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i must fly or i die even in a mindflight at least once or twice daily |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Very beautiful. I can relate. You put magic to the page. TD |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Dawn, I would prefer to stay grounded...out on the sand ....at the beach, by the water....if Gary could be there with me all the time...... But, since he can't, I can't, so...we have to fly every now and then.....yes, sometimes in our minds..... I believe that whichever one it takes in each persons life to survive in their own world is what they should do. Very good writing, sweet lady...it made me think and that's a good thing.  Hugs,  Ethel |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
I do agree… Great poetry! JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
If i could fly i would zoom gracefuly around they sky ... only because i don't know how to land I loved this one |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Woman . . . your writing just blows me away. jimmy |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Very very nice... But this part "I’m at the base, the bottom beginnings and endings and I'll be damned if the ashes call for me. I’m going to lay right here and listen to footsteps eroding me on their climb to the top." My favorite |
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