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Drop Serene
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Drop Serene |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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fraught in the keep of mortality. Beware the black iris growing in pair, in court of the death of the dream. Tossing the curve against line of the spike laughing in thrall of mad Luna's beguile-- a poison fermenting from innocent wine-- the weep of the moon, Drop Serene. confirming chattel such fine keep? The lady wears a poison ring revealing secrets perilous. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
well well, we both seem to be ocularly focused on this eve m'lady... interesting spell  |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Wow.. you know such interesting things, and teach us all of them! A great mind  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very cool! ya learn somethin' new every day! thanks! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
What a skilled poetess you are! I always appreciate learning new things. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Before my mother-in-law died she gave my son a poison ring..its a spider and he wears it to this day... Very well done, and I enjoy your teachings very much.. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
cast a spell, spin a web? me thinks you "drop" poetry with brilliance.  ... and it's you ... you ... you ... you ... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Beware the invisable ring of uncertainty. Good write, enjoyed. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Beware the black iris growing in pair, in court of the death of the dream. ~*~ Chant away.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing ..just amazing Ser. Much enjoyed this spell. Hugs and love ya lady~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen?... this...is VERY cool... and?...I learned something too...smile love you, lady...  "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Your mind is amazing Gorgeous. Mxx What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
What a fascinating poem, Serenity. One that required research, too. Sigh. I remember when I wasn't lazy and researched material for poems! Loved, loved: Beware the black iris growing in pair, in court of the death of the dream Corinne |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
GEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZ.... I'm so stupid.  sigh. Allow me to explain. This was supposed to be posted under the name Hypatia, as I have a series of these I wanted to do... Oh well. I was never much for keeping secrets. Especially my own. I hope you all enjoyed. Maybe Hypatia will come out to play again afterall. Damn I'm dumb... sheesh.  Thanks for reading. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Great piece you and LOVE the title! jwesley |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Oooh, very cool. I like it! You weave such rich poetry. ~*Krista Lee Knutson*~ |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hypatia, I really enjoyed this lesson you have presented. You are good, SereneOne. With Heart Hugs and love, Ethel |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Pseudonyms are so cool! Me and Allan Riverwood agree with that one for sure! Did you know that this username started out as a complete joke and turned into my full-time identity here? I've been thinking of posting as someone different for a while, too. If you had posted as someone new I wouldn't have bothered reading this, because the title sounds very amateur-poetry, so it's maybe a good thing (for me) that you bothered to post it as yourself. Had I, I still would have pegged this as being you, because of the music of your words---the natural meter at which I forever shake a jealous fist. You're a lovely woman, but I'm afraid I know nothing of what your poem speaks... I've never heard of a poison ring. Take my comments for what they're worth, even if it's nothing---and if you explain to me, I'll read with a less hungry mind and have a fine dessert--- Love you, lady Brian |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
Awesome. Whew. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think I'm with LP. I truly believe that you could not hide your style for long. LOL...Trust me, I know! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile... Hypatia was more for my benefit than a forum secret. Y'see? As I told Vicky, there was this guy in college who used to call me that. She's an interesting historical figure too, but? Am mathmetician I ain't! http://www-gap.dcs.st-and.ac.uk/~history/Mathematicians/Hypatia.html Anyway, she's just another aspect of me. Giggle. I wear a tiara when I write her poetry, and since I have a few of these snooty "lesson" poems, I thought, why not? I'm nuts, I tell ya.  |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
The imagery pulled me in different directions. Seriously, I thought of middle-earth, Harry Potter, & for some strange reason that horror movie about making a horror movie [can't remember the name]. Cool! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and for Allan Riverwood (great name for a movie star btw) my humble explanation-- "Nothing is spared and no thing forgotten fraught in the keep of mortality." --This is my proposition that all we are is what we know as imprinted upon us not only by conscious experience, but imprinting on subconscious levels as well as cellular memory. (glad I didn't type that in Philosophy, eh? )"Beware the black iris growing in pair, in court of the death of the dream." This is references to the eyes, "black iris growing in pair" widening to adjust to a dimming of light. My veiled metaphor. Sheesh. "Tossing the curve against line of the spike" a layered visual which jumped to the flower, the Iris, (depicted emblematic as a fleur-di-lis) but the description of curve against spiky lines is quite literal if you've ever seen them in bloom in the wild. Here, La. there is a dark purple iris, it almost looks black in shadows. "laughing in thrall of mad Luna's beguile--" --more allusion to nightfall, with the intimation of giddy lunacy which would be this: "a poison fermenting from innocent wine--" (a perfect thing contaminated) the weep of the moon, Drop Serene. (my ultimate metaphor) concluding in the analogy of blindness as a refusal to see when confronted with chaos too difficult to comprehend all at once. "What sane reasoning proposed confirming chattel such fine keep?" This is just me questioning why hold onto to behaviors when we know, intellectually the reasons for them, and yet we continue to live as though blind. "The lady wears a poison ring" A poison ring is a ring with a compartment, as depicted in fables, often containing a drop of poison. I used this as a metaphor to depict the idea that if we know we have negative behavior and continue to hold on to it in spite of our knowing, then it becomes a fatal adornment. "revealing secrets perilous." And the reason that we do that is because we are imprinted by the experiences, and it's a "perilous" journey to the honesty of truth which allows us the courage to be free of the bindings of our own design. and, chuckle, no, I didn't write this one "straight to keys." I'll bet you're sorry you asked, huh? Sheesh. Love ya, you. hugs |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
quote: This is just me questioning why hold onto to behaviors when we know, intellectually the reasons for them, and yet we continue to live as though blind. you know what the moth says baby... WHY ASK WHY.  *L*Brilliant AND beautiful... yessssss....you are.  |
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