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River of Heart
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River of Heart |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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In the river I learned to swim and pulled myself ashore. I watch reflections floating by, punctuating time. Sitting still I hear the words Pronounced above the drowning rhymes. “Staying afloat is not enough, climb, climb.” In the flux and flow of life I’ve found some truth. I’ve been a wife. I’ve seen the rise of waves of love And known the flow of sorrow’s salt Drowning hearts of turtle doves. Staying afloat is not enough, climb, climb. The river gives, the river takes, the river yins, The river yangs. The river bends but continues on. It wrestles drought and weathers storm And bears relentless souls afire. Aspiring so toward something higher. Just staying afloat is not enough, climb. [This message has been edited by iliana (04-27-2004 01:05 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
so true! this is an excellent write! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thanks, Dixie -- keep climbing, I am.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write...just keep on climbing. Hugs~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Nancy Lee, thank you bunches. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
My dear, Nature has a way of showing us what we need to do. The tried and true methods of existence...of survival, and of freedom. Inner peace is precious. Climb..climb. You did her proud. TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
TD, what a gem of a thing for you to say! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Excellent job, Jo. I'm proud of you. You've climbed over some pretty rough terrain. Lil Sis |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sadie -- yep, but I never seem to get to the flat land -- still working on it! Thanks, cutie. [This message has been edited by iliana (04-26-2004 03:20 AM).] |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
A delightful, exhilarating write! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I missed your stuff. It has so much wisdom (You may not think so) for me to take in. Alot of the poems here do. Juju |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Grover, thank you kind sir! Yes, climbing can be exhilarating -- lol! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Juju, what a really flatering thing to say; I'm glad you think so, and thanks for your sweet words. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Aspiring so toward something higher. Just staying afloat is not enough, climb. Yep, my friend, we have to keep on keeping on, don't we? A very good write...so true.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ethel -- Thank you, sweet lady! Happy Sunday! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
this is great - very compelling write - Paul |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thanks, Paul -- appreciate your kind comments. |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
I like the metaphor in climbing to make a situation better than just floating... original and fresh in word... very good writing, indeed. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Opeth, you're very sweet to post such a kind comment! Thank you. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
I found the last stanza or too very inspiring...good use of metaphor. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Beki -- thanks for the kind remark. I was so impressed with your recent post! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
climbing is a good start tho coasting is more comfortable at times too nice way of metaphor use here |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
life would be so unaccountable if we just floated along...love your outlook Lady and this poem is a wealth of positivity! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Lee, thanks for your remarks, and how good you make me feel! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am having trouble just staying afloat  M |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
M girl -- take care and keep floating. It will get better, it will! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wise words, iliana, wise words. Corinne |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
iliana You have given us such a wonderful piece of writing that is so very inspiring. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
"Just staying afloat is not enough, climb. " How true and wonderful written is this piece my friend. (now, if I could just get the concrete off my feet....) jwesley |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely....James |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Jo, I enjoyed your wise and beautiful write greatly. It holds a lesson and an incentive to ask more of ourselves, because we CAN! Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
wisdom and truth, much written between the lines as well...  ~~**~~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thank you all dear poets for your kind remarks! ......jo |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwww, I couldn't agree with you more, sweet friend, I believe the river is the blue ribbon that nourishes and nurtures the spirit of life and if we can all try and hear the voices of the water, we will feel true balance and harmony! (kiss on cheek) Yay, may your heart always be cradled on the waters of love and happiness, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jo, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Noah - and thanks. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, One of your best-just had to stop by and read this again. (But you have sooo many good ones, it's hard to tell which is your best-I like them all!) luv ya, sadie |
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