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JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2004-04-23 07:55 PM

The Sweetest One

There's no one in this world
like my sweet girl.
She's got everything I need.
She does it for me.

Take yesterday for example.
She told me to meet her at ten thirty.
"It's so nice to see you,"
was the first thing she said
when she met me.
Now I don't have to tell you that I
feel exactly the same way, but it
sounds so sweet when she says it,
that it just blows me away.

Like flowers in a meadow
that need the morning sun
I hunger for my sweet girl,
for she's the sweetest one.

JamesLee
April23
2004

Opeth
Senior Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

1 posted 2004-04-23 08:13 PM

All I can say is that I appreciate how you appreciate your "girl" - she seems very special, so don't ever lose her.

dingusjr
Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 415
Missouri

2 posted 2004-04-23 08:15 PM

Nice...just real nice...reminds me of my
young and lovely wife.

loner187
Member

since 2004-03-21

Posts 106
Upstate New York

3 posted 2004-04-23 10:53 PM

It's good, but missing something. I think you should add more to it. The ending isn't a real ending to me, it needs more. Then it would be better. More descriptions and just build on it, see what you get!

What if the hokey pokey is what it's all about?

mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox