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where two dark-winged arrows meet
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where two dark-winged arrows meet |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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where two dark-winged arrows meet in the red of earth two serpent trunks rise then twist in greet of eucalypt lines tell their age and just behind the spread of leaves a messy afro springing here and there peeps the moon she lights the gravel white in serpo creep where two dark-winged arrows meet spangled-bound against the gum and there I am arms wrapped round knees to chest my eyes against the sky holding poesy in my hand with you in focus 230404 What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god What are you my twin? You affect me like you are my twin. Go Alanis! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"and there I am arms wrapped round knees to chest my eyes against the sky holding poesy in my hand with you in focus" Wow...and Wow again!! You write so beautifully even when you're tired.  Hugs to you pretty lady~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
An enchantment Darksis...very cool |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
where do you get the inspiration? wow! |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
what a sighting  ....... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
and just behind the spread of leaves a messy afro springing here and there peeps the moon she lights the gravel white in serpo creep ~*~ It was a good day for you, then...  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
tremendously description...well done |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Bravo... and you make it seem so easy... just as if it flows from the pen to the paper and from there...to our hearts and minds.. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thank you..you're all so lovely. I appreciate your replies and comments and you taking the time to stop by and read Thank you. Maree What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I much enjoyed this one, excellent! "A spring shower was cause to run |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Funny, the afro image made me smile, it reminds me of an Ent(treepeople for the uninitiated) in Lord of the Rings. There's a specific Ent who's willow like appearance makes him look dreadlocked, I call him Rasta Ent.Picture him lazing around smoking his own leaves..um..yeah nevermind. Its 4 am do you know where your sleep is? 'Quantum materiae materietur marmota monax si marmota |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"and there I am arms wrapped round knees to chest my eyes against the sky holding poesy in my hand with you in focus" Beautiful poetic conclusion! Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"and there I am arms wrapped round knees to chest my eyes against the sky holding poesy in my hand with you in focus" Beautiful poetic conclusion! Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I love this scene and your collocation! Wondrous. Love, Margherita |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
and there I am arms wrapped round knees to chest my eyes against the sky holding poesy in my hand with you in focus I can almost see you there, Maree. Such good writing, sweet lady.   and  |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
The closing was magnifico Mmy! the rest was eccellente too big hugs JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Beautiful, Maree...this is simply magnificent. Reminds me of another poem I read once, about a banyan tree and the way it reaches down to the ground and anchors it to the sky... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I love the way you brush the imagery, set the scene, suggest the moment a keeper for me |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A creative and magical piece of writing! Captivating! EA |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh i see you there... and its exactly where you belong. damned pretty |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree Amazing poem!  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i love this: i live there too along with you....... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Amazingg write, Maree! The imagery was out of this world!!! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Thank you Ink, for popping this back up again! Beautiful stuff! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
As always Maree, you leave me utterly speechless...This was just good, damn good!!...there are no other words I can use. Take care darlin and drop me a line sometime when you get a chance. Hugs, Amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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